Bulimic Baby

[GildedWeb]

Toilet seat
Your oh so neat
spilling your guts
you dream in ruts

Head bowed
avoid the crowd
You learn to love the flush
Its a heady rush

Red knuckles
Fix your buckles

Back to the grind
In a better state of mind

[Prole]

I'm a little confused over the line "red knuckles" it evokes a fist fight. I've always been white knuckled when toilet hugging (self inflicted, nonbulemic) was this intended?

[GildedWeb]

Hi Prole, if youve ever encountered an actual bulimic and look at their hands they are usually red and chaffed. Scraping teeth and the acid eats at the skin.

That and the bad enamel on the teeth are usually telling signs of a purger.

Thanks for pointing it out to me though, I didnt consider what image it would provoke for others.

[Pendragon]

I have to ask. What audience are you seeking with this poem? This illness is certainly not one to joke about, it kills people. Do you think reading this poem is going to help stop someone who has the illness from continuing on her self-destructive path? Yeah, that's a good idea, make fun of them, they'll quit. Right. So, purpose, please? As one who himself suffers from stigma flung by others, I get just a bit touchy over people treating our illnesses as things to laugh or make into movies so that we live like hermits.

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[Logos]

(?) Pen, I don't see any making 'fun' of going on here.

[GildedWeb]

I have to ask. What audience are you seeking with this poem? This illness is certainly not one to joke about, it kills people. Do you think reading this poem is going to help stop someone who has the illness from continuing on her self-destructive path? Yeah, that's a good idea, make fun of them, they'll quit. Right. So, purpose, please? As one who himself suffers from stigma flung by others, I get just a bit touchy over people treating our illnesses as things to laugh or make into movies so that we live like hermits.

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Actually I wasnt poking fun at anyone. It isnt intended for any certain audience. It kills yes..but from the mind of someone who does it its their only salvation.

As a matter of fact there are people in the world who do it for reasons Im guessing you couldnt fathom. Like the love of the purge, the high of it, some even find it sexy to watch.

To me it isnt a stigma..its just another way of life.

[GildedWeb]

(?) Pen, I don't see any making 'fun' of going on here.

No I wasnt poking fun at anyone. Just something Ive encountered and it moved me to write. No more, no less.

[Logos]

.... it moved me to write.
Well, I hope you share more of your poetry with us :)

[AuntShecky]

Pen, I agree with you for the most part on this statement of yours:
"I get just a bit touchy over people treating our illnesses as things to laugh or make into movies so that we live like hermits."

There is scarcely a family that doesn't have a member affected by such conditions. There is ridicule, however, and there are more tactful ways to treat certain disabilities. The American television series, for instance,
Monk, and the movie Rain Man, both have wonderfully humorous touches but no one would ever think either work is "making fun" of people w. disabilities.

The piece that opens this thread isn't humorous; I took its voice as coming from the person suffering from the affliction and not a taunt.

[caelycate]

i really loved it. and i can say pendragon, as someone who struggled with bulemia off and on for a long time, i don't see any logic in your criticism. i thought it was a beautiful, raw poem that describes someone's struggle, and in no way belittled the diesase or made fun of it.

[Pendragon]

Fair enough. My apologies to GildedWeb. Although finding it "sexy to watch?" Ewww! That I cannot imagine why, but it does give a vivid image at that! :lol:

My hand and my apologies, and keep writing! I may get critical of another poem, but I will try not to raise issues beyond writing style or word choice. Feel free to critque my own poetry or stories as well, as I lay no claims to perfection.

Pen

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