I Had A Dream

[dibyendra]

Your review and suggestion would be highly appreciated.

I HAD SEEN A DREAM
- To my beloved brother

It's not that we don't care about you; rumours that the prying eyes had spread are not true.
Everyone in the family loves you. They do care about you, your future, and your career.
We talk almost about you everyday, hoping and praying, clinging on hopes and fears.
There's still a fire in your eyes which I fear that one spark might devastate and collapse all the dreams that we have.
There're still glitches; they need to get fixed. Let's work it out; it’s now or never.
If we understand each others feelings, this kind of problems won’t intervene again.
Please share your smouldered grievances with us, we'd definitely listen.
Anger starts with violence, but ends in desperate silence.
Please don’t think to clash. Please never, you know that end is always bitter.
Don’t let this sweet family die and wither.
Howsoever the problem is, can be resolved, only if all wish to.
If we all listen to each other and get stronger, we could chase outsiders from breaking us apart.
So, let's get rid of this complication. I would beg you please not to bring this sweet family to its knees.
Don't let outsiders snoop and intrude the problem.
Please come back to life and let's start this life once again.
If this problem cannot be solved, let me be dead forever.
If my sacrifice would bring life in this family, I would.
I just cannot see the tears in mother's eye, gloom in the face of father, and depression in the family anymore.
I had seen a dream recently about our family that the bond we had earlier just prospered once again, and our parents, they were so happy that this family has found a new life.
See, how you can make a difference if you only let it be.
So, please let this dream come into real.
If our prayers are strong enough, clouds that are concentrated, they would all disperse and warm sun will shine again.
These are the words all I have for you my dear brother, which all I'm saying is to reunite.
Please, come back and bring this family to life once again.

[dibyendra]

Adapt

You're not happy with life that you're living;
you have family and friends, but still a solitary leading--
always wondering “Where could I probably fit in?”
Silence shouts “Nobody understands my feelings!”
You're tired of arguing everyday on questions they have triggered...
Collision of interests and opinions alienated you--
made you ill-tempered;
now, you're running away from every face you meet.
Your paranoia made you irritated and sick.
Still, you're not willing to get pain off your chest;
not even with your nearest and dearest?
You rather love to lock yourself in your lonely chamber
and love to talk with your own reflection.
Does that lead you toward the solution?
No, it's just driving you toward the distraction!
Your seclusion made yourself afraid of your own shadow...
You're not ready to live like this any more.

Oh please,
don't let this problem intensify any more.
Throw down your anger!
Don't let anger mislead you.
Break down the wall of suspicion,
escaping is not the solution.
There are no alternatives
without facing the problem.

Oh come on now,
heal those estrangements;
forgiveness can be the healer.
Let the relation come alive again;
confess if you're wrong;
that won't let you down either.
You do care about them, don't you?
Just like they're worried for you.

Within psyche of the people
There are many facets of life,
Learn to co-exist with them
just like we live with changing seasons
Oh come on now, come out of the darkness!

Sunday, August 26, 2007
© Dibyendra Hyoju

[dibyendra]

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[mahishi]

really good as i feel, is this a real incident? you have given lot of advises to the reader indirectly here.

[dibyendra]

really good as i feel, is this a real incident? you have given lot of advises to the reader indirectly here.

Thank you so much Mahishi for your comment. Yes, I had written this one for my elder brother who seemed estranged and depressed since last couple of months. I'm hoping and praying for his comeback.

[mahishi]

Thank you so much Mahishi for your comment. Yes, I had written this one for my elder brother who seemed estranged and depressed since last couple of months. I'm hoping and praying for his comeback.

I WILL HOPE YOUR WISH WILL COME TRUE. He will come back soon .I beleive inner love for someone can do anything.

[Pendragon]

Dear Dibby:

As the one in your poem, for I am the elder brother in my family and I have the problems, I wish my younger brother were like you and would write such a poem and send it, desirous of healing the family. But alas, it is not so, and I must be like the second poem, trying to hel things on my own. Good poems, mon ami. Well Done! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/NiceDay.gif

[dibyendra]

I WILL HOPE YOUR WISH WILL COME TRUE. He will come back soon .I beleive inner love for someone can do anything.


Dear Dibby:

As the one in your poem, for I am the elder brother in my family and I have the problems, I wish my younger brother were like you and would write such a poem and send it, desirous of healing the family. But alas, it is not so, and I must be like the second poem, trying to hel things on my own. Good poems, mon ami. Well Done! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/NiceDay.gif

Many many thanks to Mahishi and Pen for your kind words. Mahishi, I pray for that and thank you very much for elevating me in the time of need. And Pen, thank you for your wonderful comment and appreciating my work. You are the one.

[Countess]

Hey Dib,

"Adapt" is the best because in it you drill down to the heart of the person, to their soul and their needs. I found myself identifying with your brother, and as a writer, you want that - the reader to either understand your position or his position, to feel your or his feelings. A few things that *may* improve it (may, because I don't really know).

I see your brother is severely depressed (paranoia is sign of the most serious kind). What specific things have you seen him do or found him doing or not doing that are unique to him? IE "I saw the Power Bill unpaid, lying on your desk, a testimony to your hollow emptiness...".

It will help us know him better - it will draw us into his world.

I know you love your brother dearly, so when you speak of prayers - tell me about them. "Last night leaning over bedside I asked God why...". This will help us know you better.

Otherwise, good job and I do hope things getter better for him. I know how he feels.

[caelycate]

as someone who once alienated myself from those who love me, your poems resonated strongly. i hope things work out - it's good your brother has someone who cares. as for the work itself, i really liked the style - it's almost more like a letter than a poem - but in a good way if that makes sense.

[mahishi]

Dear Dibby:

As the one in your poem, for I am the elder brother in my family and I have the problems, I wish my younger brother were like you and would write such a poem and send it, desirous of healing the family. But alas, it is not so, and I must be like the second poem, trying to hel things on my own. Good poems, mon ami. Well Done! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/NiceDay.gif

Dibby, is pen your elder brother?:)

[ReynardKitsune]

great
!!! i wish i can write as well as you do how did you do it!

[jon1jt]

You rather love to lock yourself in your lonely chamber
and love to talk with your own reflection.

How unbearably true this is, and your poem points back to the basic problem, ourselves.

One suggestion: I would change, 'Within the psyche'

[kiz_paws]

Dear Dibyendra: Your brother is so lucky to have a loving person in you to write such beautiful longings for peace and happiness within the family. Your words are so beautifully put together and so touching. I really felt your sadness and longing in the reading of both poems. Great work!

And I also do wish to say that I hope for your brother to come to a resolution of the problems and to greet you with the open arms that you offer. Peace, K♥z

[dibyendra]

Thank you very much everyone for your warm comments, suggestions, and consolations in the time of need. I'm very much grateful for that. Your prayers made me strong. Thank you so much everyone.

Love,
Dibyendra