a universe within a rose

[lucidnightmares]

you went in search of something beautiful
you wanted something to give you purpose
along the way you discovered truth, pain, loss
you found beauty and it threw you away

and so you withdrew, inside your head
built a fortress from your broken emotions
sealed all your windows, locked all your doors
the pain was too great and the joy to fleeting

as the lights go down your moon shall rise
a broken omen, a precious gem to light your way
but you shot it down with all your hatred
and buried your pain in a class casket

and you watched as it died, slowly withered
mercilessly threw away hope to give you solace
surrounded by thorns and things best not seen
your sorrow became a god, held all your devotion

beauty was something best left alone
your mind attacked you with questions
why is life so hard? why do we die? how?
for your doubts drew a curtain around your eyes

and as you went blind with rage, your heart...
...felt something strange, not meant for you
this strange feeling...you had to rid yourself
for with joy came only pain, with laughter came tears

and your moon rose from it`s class prison
as your pain ate away at your soul
and a sun did set upon the horizon of fate
for happiness isn`t something we can grasp
it is something we forge, from friends, family, lovers
and your mind did break, your walls did shatter
the glass of sorrow shimmered as it faded away
your eyes opened one last time, to see the truth of your lonely world
looked back on your time to see what was lost
looked toward the moon to see what will be
and looked in yourself to find a rose
withered and torn, faded and grotesque
and yet you held it tight to your chest
and you smiled as you found your purpose
to create beauty from misery

and now your rose has grown a bed
to sleep in thorns and beauty
and your eyes are reflections of the great moon
for within you is peace, joy content

for life is exquisite, life is grotesque
make your own world for which to see
create joy from something forgotten
forge a destiny in which to revel

[sparr0w]

Wow, Lucid, each poem you post just gets better and better. The imagery in this one is amazing. Throughout the first half or so I was picturing someone slowly building a wall around them brick by brick, constructing an almost overwhelming facade. And then, with:

for happiness isn`t something we can grasp
it is something we forge, from friends, family, lovers
and your mind did break, your walls did shatter

I picture it all falling away again violently, alot like that scene in "The Wall".
After that happens, If I'm interpreting it right, whomever you're talking about (I still can't tell if you're talking about yourself, someone you know, or someone completely ficticious) realizes that sometimes pain is necesary to bring about certain revelations in yourself. That sometimes you have to endure a harsh winter before you can fully enjoy a warm and sunny summer. It's actually kind of strange, as I have been writing back and forth with someone else on these forums about just that for the last week. Oh, and there was one line in particular that I loved:

"you found beauty and it threw you away"

All in all, I will say it again, Lucid, Each thing you've posted here since I registered has been a little better than the last. This one, however, is better by leaps and bounds! Tell me, do these poems, all strung together, tell a story? It seems to me like they're all kind of related, as if you could string them all together to form an epic of sorts. Keep letting me know when you post! I really enjoy your style, and especially your imagery. Peace!!!

[lucidnightmares]

thank you so much
it really means alot to me, i kinda threw it all away on this one, got the inspiration from a john butler trio song, Caroline.
as far as an epic goes, they weren`t intended to form a story, it`s just kind of the evolution of who i am and what i feel...but then again i guess it`s an accidental epic in that sense:idea:
you always seam to see things for what they truly are, whether intentional or not on my part.
and as far as the "you" in the story i think i was going for an everyone kind of feel..i don`t know why but it just felt right to me at the time, kind of what i`m going through i guess so it was intended for me and everyone else to show that we can create our own happiness :D

however to be truthful i have to give credit to everyone who has ever commented on any of my poems, as helped me shaped who i am as a person and a poet and for that i am truly blessed.
so again thank you and sorry for rambling on about nothing like i always do:blush:

as always i hope you keep me updated on your works as well for they always help me when i`m faced with confusion or uncertainty about what to write.

[ampoule]

Wow! You should read this while looking at Pendragon's picture in the picture poetry contest. The personal growth in this is amazing to me. Truth.

[Pendragon]

I agree with Amp with one reservation-- why didn't you just enter it in the contest?!! God, it's a good poem and goes with the picture! One point: did you mean "class" or "glass" casket? I read it as "glass" as that seemed to make more meaning to the poem. Just wondering. Good writing!

Pen

[kiz_paws]

That poem had me spellbound, you are an awesome writer. Keep up the great work! :)

[Granny5]

So beautiful. Great poem.

[lucidnightmares]

thank you all very much
and sorry pendragon i wrote this one after i wrote the picture poetry contests one:(
and yea it was supposed to be glass i kinda wrote this one alittle quickly

this means the world to me thank you all very much
this made my day so much better:D