Xzibit21
02-18-2008, 07:58 PM
My teacher says "show not tell" ..... did I do that ?
It was a beautiful Saturday morning. The sky was blue and sun was bright. It was a perfect day to go to Wonderland. There I was looking out the window at 6:30 am. I just could not sleep. The excitement of going to an amusement park for the first time was overwhelming. My parents woke up at 9:00am. My mother, father, brother and I all sat down and eat breakfast together. I was very excited. At 9:30am we left our house. The highway was completely jammed. I grew restless and proceeded with chants of “are we there yet” multiple times. My parents got mad and threatened to go back home if I did not be quiet. I became quiet. The Gill family finally arrived at Wonderland. My face was in total “awe”.
The parking lot was huge. I presented my ticket and entered the amusement park. My jaw completely dropped. Rides and candy were everywhere. Wonderland was considered my utopia. I tugged my father’s shirt and asked to go on rides. My father smiled and patted my head. We walked towards our first roller coaster but was stopped by a photographer. The photographer took a picture of our family. We walked along. Then I came eye to eye with the rollercoaster.
It was called the Dragonflyer. With time, I would understand why. The logo consisted of a dragon breathing out fire. The moment was tense and nerve wrecking. I took a big breath and began to walk towards the roller coaster. The safety harness locked into place. My father was next to me, trying to frighten me. He told me the roller coaster was going to break. I started to shiver and get worried. The roller coaster started creating weird noises. I became more terrified. My father than told me I was going to fall off in the loop. I raised my eyebrow and began to think about it. My hands gripped the rail with might. The roller coaster began to steep higher and higher. I could see the entire park at the peak. I saw my car. The roller coaster began and I received an adrenaline rush. My eyes were open the entire ride. My hands were tightly gripped and my heart pumping. The ride finished. A big smile arose on my face. I was so happy and looked forward to more rides.
The next ride was Nightmares. Spinning around and eventually becoming parallel with the ground. The ride was intimidating as your face looked to the ground. I took a big breath and stepped in line. The locks were engaged and the ride began. My father played devils advocate once again. I was not fazed this time. Only a big smile showed on my face. I felt like I was on top of the world. I spoke to soon.
We moved onto the Bat. The ride was a semi-roller coaster. The twist with this ride was that it went backwards as well. The line up was huge. The wait was 45minutes. The next step was on the ride. The horrific screams I heard during the line were starting to get to me. I took a big breath and entered the ride. The ride began. The coaster started making noises it did not before. I became nervous. The roller coaster finally began. Everything ran smoothly. I spoke too soon. The roller coaster stopped in the middle of a semi-loop. My father and I were stuck upside down. I was petrified. My father’s words came true.
Passengers on the ride started shouting. I remain calmed and just closed my eyes. My father and I were upside down for about 10 minutes. The time felt like an eternity. The wonderland crew fixed the problem. My father and I escaped without any damage. The day ended after we left the ride. What was suppose to be a day of fun had turned into a day of possible disaster.
It was a beautiful Saturday morning. The sky was blue and sun was bright. It was a perfect day to go to Wonderland. There I was looking out the window at 6:30 am. I just could not sleep. The excitement of going to an amusement park for the first time was overwhelming. My parents woke up at 9:00am. My mother, father, brother and I all sat down and eat breakfast together. I was very excited. At 9:30am we left our house. The highway was completely jammed. I grew restless and proceeded with chants of “are we there yet” multiple times. My parents got mad and threatened to go back home if I did not be quiet. I became quiet. The Gill family finally arrived at Wonderland. My face was in total “awe”.
The parking lot was huge. I presented my ticket and entered the amusement park. My jaw completely dropped. Rides and candy were everywhere. Wonderland was considered my utopia. I tugged my father’s shirt and asked to go on rides. My father smiled and patted my head. We walked towards our first roller coaster but was stopped by a photographer. The photographer took a picture of our family. We walked along. Then I came eye to eye with the rollercoaster.
It was called the Dragonflyer. With time, I would understand why. The logo consisted of a dragon breathing out fire. The moment was tense and nerve wrecking. I took a big breath and began to walk towards the roller coaster. The safety harness locked into place. My father was next to me, trying to frighten me. He told me the roller coaster was going to break. I started to shiver and get worried. The roller coaster started creating weird noises. I became more terrified. My father than told me I was going to fall off in the loop. I raised my eyebrow and began to think about it. My hands gripped the rail with might. The roller coaster began to steep higher and higher. I could see the entire park at the peak. I saw my car. The roller coaster began and I received an adrenaline rush. My eyes were open the entire ride. My hands were tightly gripped and my heart pumping. The ride finished. A big smile arose on my face. I was so happy and looked forward to more rides.
The next ride was Nightmares. Spinning around and eventually becoming parallel with the ground. The ride was intimidating as your face looked to the ground. I took a big breath and stepped in line. The locks were engaged and the ride began. My father played devils advocate once again. I was not fazed this time. Only a big smile showed on my face. I felt like I was on top of the world. I spoke to soon.
We moved onto the Bat. The ride was a semi-roller coaster. The twist with this ride was that it went backwards as well. The line up was huge. The wait was 45minutes. The next step was on the ride. The horrific screams I heard during the line were starting to get to me. I took a big breath and entered the ride. The ride began. The coaster started making noises it did not before. I became nervous. The roller coaster finally began. Everything ran smoothly. I spoke too soon. The roller coaster stopped in the middle of a semi-loop. My father and I were stuck upside down. I was petrified. My father’s words came true.
Passengers on the ride started shouting. I remain calmed and just closed my eyes. My father and I were upside down for about 10 minutes. The time felt like an eternity. The wonderland crew fixed the problem. My father and I escaped without any damage. The day ended after we left the ride. What was suppose to be a day of fun had turned into a day of possible disaster.