a soldier's letter to his mother

[ahsiam]

bugles sang truce
for the dead dark of the night
i lied on my bed and tried to sleep
though i was enough tired.


i saw a dream
an antique face burning on a blazed pyre
a body covered with the shroud
i screamed and woke up
in the dark with mute silence
my thoughts wandered away
from this battlefield's dreadful array.


my thoughts took me to you, mother
to your smiling face
and our sweet memories
i remembered your words
and i remembered you
there is low time for this bare winter to be spring
but i am scared
i am scared of this dark
and of this crimson world of blood
will this world be my last place to live?
will i fail to give all these letters to you,mother?
will i be killed by these demons,
be impotent to save you from their evil hands,
to save our country from them?


i am afraid, mother
i am afraid of this world
hold my fear with your love
give me strength
and make me brave.


bugles sang again
a new sun arose
and a new leaf born
give me your love
and let me reborn
i will conquer all.

[symphony]

U do know how this takes me to 1971 dont u? It feels so good to know we still feel these, feel the blood, the significance. And we know it wont just die, or get lost in the coming crowd. That it'll still be what it is to us, makes me feel warm and proud. Warm for the memories, proud to be remembering.

And i felt so proud (of u, this time) when i thought of what kind of feelings u've been putting in this piece. When people have been planning for 21st-february-picnics and fiestas (i just heard of 3), u've been writing this!
Thanks, and well done, bud. :)

[Anza]

nice. I like the colorful adjectives!

[wagravity]

this was a great poem throughout. but i do not like the title. you could name it anything. but "a soldier's letter his mother" just makes this poem seem false. no one would ever write a letter like this EVER. that's where the words and the meaning behind them become false to me. This was a phenomenal poem, it really was, i can't deny you that.

great work

[ahsiam]

U do know how this takes me to 1971 dont u? It feels so good to know we still feel these, feel the blood, the significance. And we know it wont just die, or get lost in the coming crowd. That it'll still be what it is to us, makes me feel warm and proud. Warm for the memories, proud to be remembering.

And i felt so proud (of u, this time) when i thought of what kind of feelings u've been putting in this piece. When people have been planning for 21st-february-picnics and fiestas (i just heard of 3), u've been writing this!
Thanks, and well done, bud. :)

thanks symph.:D you dont know how much happy i am to know that you are proud of me.:D you know.....its one of those times.........:D
jokhon likhesi akushe february r kotha mone silo na. anek din thekei likhte chassilam. and i wrote it. kintu jotot valo expect koresilam its not that good.

again thanks.:D

[ahsiam]

nice. I like the colorful adjectives!


thank you.:D didnt know my adjectives were colourful.:lol:


this was a great poem throughout. but i do not like the title. you could name it anything. but "a soldier's letter his mother" just makes this poem seem false. no one would ever write a letter like this EVER. that's where the words and the meaning behind them become false to me. This was a phenomenal poem, it really was, i can't deny you that.

great work

about the title- i didnt mean it as a wordly meaning,gave the title based on inner meaning.the inner meaning is that the soldier in his mind writing a letter to his mother. he knows that its even tough to write a letter and give it. so......... thats it!
and thanks.:D my poem is PHENOMENAL.........didnt expect that much!:blush:
i am glad you liked it.:)

[dibyendra]

I liked the emotions portrayed here Ahsiam. The emotion which real soldier feels in the battleground are beautifully portrayed here. Third stanza is really great; the feelings which soldier is trying to convey to his mother. And the last stanza brings some hope and is beautifully ended. Keep up your good work Ahsiam. :thumbs_up

[ahsiam]

I liked the emotions portrayed here Ahsiam. The emotion which real soldier feels in the battleground are beautifully portrayed here. Third stanza is really great; the feelings which soldier is trying to convey to his mother. And the last stanza brings some hope and is beautifully ended. Keep up your good work Ahsiam. :thumbs_up

thanks dibeyandra. i am glad that you like it.
when i was a beginner i never thought i'd go this far to potrate a person's feelings. that was a great comment too. :p
your words will be my inspiration always.:)

[scarlet pain]

dear friend i am speechless.i'm proud that you feel this way.no wonder we are from the land of the great freedom fighters,it shows in your words.
bless you so that you keep on writing like this.

[johnlennon30]

"What have I seen on this page here?
It is not poem or written verse
No, it is flesh and blood so dear
That can'tbought with coins from purse...."

There's no poem with truer emotion than yours. God bless you

[ahsiam]

thank you very much scarlet and john. i am really very happy that you liked it bacause this became one of my favourite poem too.
thanks.:D