A Busker with a Broken Guitar

[Elphyon]

A busker with a broken guitar
sings an antidote for urban misery.
Between neon stars made up of Corporate letters
and spoiled lights of a lonely streetlamp
Is no stage for moonlit serenades.

The floating faces that throb along
the corners marked by illegible sings
go untouched by his sing-song voice;
a roadkill under black, rubber tires.

(line shaping does not work! It should read strum strum that string)

string,
Strum that
strum
Strike
strike
that
chord!

Chanter on, my busker friend,
obla-dibla-da till the coming
of a second Christ!

And in the case of his broken guitar:
three pennies and a palmful of dimes
just enough for a bottled DASANI
to make him sing still some more,
himself into morsels,
while night lasts.
Push Play.

[lucidnightmares]

i`m surprised no one commented on this piece

string,
Strum that
strum
Strike
strike
that
chord!

that`s the only line i don`t really like in this one, and i don`t even know why:(

other than that i really like it, reminds of john butler for some reason

The floating faces that throb along
the corners marked by illegible sings
go untouched by his sing-song voice;
a roadkill under black, rubber tires.

that was definitely my favorite line, hows the struggle of those who choose to share their song with the world, and even alittle like the poets too i guess, the fight to get noticed in a world that`s moving just alittle too fast

well that`s about all i can say for that one, i really liked it and i think i`ll check out more of your writing in the future:D

[Pendragon]

I liked the poem up until the last line. It doesn't fit. I can see your romanticized vagrant with his cracked and perhaps out-of-tune guitar singing away on the dark street corner--making little money, but enough for his drink. But "push play?" makes it fake suddenly...

[kiz_paws]

Your first verse was the most powerful, in my eyes; and verse two was quite decent, too, I thought. But the poem kind of does a bit of a twist, one that was unexpected. The last two verses were interesting (the obla-dibla-da thing was good), but not what the first two verses set out. The last line was a surprise, totally. I liked some of the phrases that you put together, and I also shall be looking for more of your work in the future. Cheers, kizzo