My Love Poem

[zabombafor]

I wrote this for my current girlfriend and wanted some opinions on if it was good or not

i never knew happiness
till i saw your smile
i never knew joy
till i held ur hand
i never saw beauty
till i saw you
i never knew sorrow
till i thought of losing you
I never felt love
until i met you

i am only 13 right now
but i still want your honest opinions
thanks

[PrinceMyshkin]

It's a good, straightforward statement of your since opinions. I imagine she'll be pleased with it.

[AuntShecky]

As you begin your verse-writing projects, it might be a good idea to follow the rules AT FIRST. For instance, an uncapitalized "i" sets the teeth of jaded readers on edge.
Once we become accomplished poets such as e e cummings, then we can think about breaking the rules. But we have to learn the rules before we break them, right?