Love will be a little late today

[PrinceMyshkin]

There was a three-car pile-up on the highway.
In car number one, the driver’s eyes
were fixed on his rear-view mirror
suspecting it was his wife’s lover
in the car just behind him.

It was not, but in the car behind that
his wife was racing to catch up with him
frantic that he had left that morning
without so much as a kiss good-bye.

Love will be a little late today,
but love is often
hurrying to catch up.


Jerry Newman © 31Jan08

[Granny5]

There was a three-car pile-up on the highway.
In car number one, the driver’s eyes
were fixed on his rear-view mirror
suspecting it was his wife’s lover
in the car just behind him.

It was not, but in the car behind that
his wife was racing to catch up with him
frantic that he had left that morning
without so much as a kiss good-bye.

Love will be a little late today,
but love is often
hurrying to catch up.


Jerry Newman © 31Jan08


Jerry, I really like this. It could be so true. You know, the last time I left for work without giving Dan a kiss he had a heart attack and three bypass surgery. I will always feel like it was because I was angry with him even if I know it isn't true.

[ampoule]

OH PRINCE JERRY! This is fantastic. I am definitely a gaper at this pile-up.

[Pendragon]

Ironic poetry, Jerry! And very well done on the twist! You always amaze me, mon ami! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Four/Whistle.gif

[PrinceMyshkin]

OH PRINCE JERRY! This is fantastic. I am definitely a gaper at this pile-up.

Whoops! In which case I may have to change that to a four-car pile-up!

[kiz_paws]

I liked the twist in the poem, and the ending was quite powerful. :thumbs_up

[Sweets America]

I love it, Sweetheart!!
I love the two sides of the poem, the twist as I think someone mentioned it (see how I spelt 'mentioned'? I am making progress:p ), and I love the ending too.
The idea of the poem, and the way you put it, are just wonderful.

[Anza]

that's so awesome. it really leaves you thinking

[motherhubbard]

J the last time I left for work without giving Dan a kiss he had a heart attack and three bypass surgery.

it was a quadruple bypass, remember-

I guess I'm not very romantic, I would have just called. ;)

I like the end. the last three lines were the best part. I think much better than the rest.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Jerry, I really like this. It could be so true. You know, the last time I left for work without giving Dan a kiss he had a heart attack and three bypass surgery. I will always feel like it was because I was angry with him even if I know it isn't true.

From what I hear, one of your more lingering kisses would be more likely to have that effect on him!

[PrinceMyshkin]

I love it, Sweetheart!!
I love the two sides of the poem, the twist as I think someone mentioned it (see how I spelt 'mentioned'? I am making progress:p ), and I love the ending too.
The idea of the poem, and the way you put it, are just wonderful.

Thank you, lover!

[NikolaiI]

This was great it reminds me of a video by Interpol for the song "untitled"

Check it out if you can, I think you'll like it from this...it can't fail to bring a tear :)

[Remarkable]

Wow,I love it!It's only that,proofs of this kind of love come very rarely to us...What has happend to the romasnticism of the world?(If it ever was...)

[Granny5]

From what I hear, one of your more lingering kisses would be more likely to have that effect on him!

Not if I brush my teeth first! :goof:

[Granny5]

it was a quadruple bypass, remember-

I guess I'm not very romantic, I would have just called. ;)

I like the end. the last three lines were the best part. I think much better than the rest.

It was a quadruple, wasn't it. I don't recall a lot of the details about it..just that I've never been so scared. You, Marc, Sarah, John, held me together.

[SleepyWitch]

I love it!
sorry, brain cell's gone on a trip through subspace, can't give you any meaningful feedback at the moment :p

[PrinceMyshkin]

I love it!
sorry, brain cell's gone on a trip through subspace, can't give you any meaningful feedback at the moment :p

Very well, but did you notice my immaculate use of light-verb constructions?

[AuntShecky]

The title reminds me of an old jazz standard --by ? -- I think that either Chris Connor or Kenton's June Christie recorded it. (I get those two chanteuses mixed up.) "Spring Will Be a Little Late This Year."

The best part of your poem are the closing two lines.

[PrinceMyshkin]

The best part of your poem are the closing two lines.

Well, just for you, I have rewritten it:



Love is often
hurrying to catch up.
It races side by side
with jealousy, insecurity,
our need to make a name
or a buck.
It is often out-of-breath,
unsure of foot,
timid and
--too late.

[symphony]

i think i like it.... but i'm not sure i'll like it if i read it tomorrow.

[PrinceMyshkin]

i think i like it.... but i'm not sure i'll like it if i read it tomorrow.

In which case, please don't read it tomorrow but wait until the day after that.

[firefangled]

True dat, Prince! One of your best of these little shorties, I think.

[blazeofglory]

There was a three-car pile-up on the highway.
In car number one, the driver’s eyes
were fixed on his rear-view mirror
suspecting it was his wife’s lover
in the car just behind him.

It was not, but in the car behind that
his wife was racing to catch up with him
frantic that he had left that morning
without so much as a kiss good-bye.

Love will be a little late today,
but love is often
hurrying to catch up.


Jerry Newman © 31Jan08


Prince. what a beautiful poem you wrote and I got really absorbed in it. For this poem is really reflective of what goes on with our day-today life and in point of fact all go through this stage. You are very much close to the realities all of us undergo.

Really I got emotionally charged after going this poem. This is a beauty you have created. Small but deepening and touching the core of our heart.

[Tuninks]

Truly beautiful work Prince... Good job, really.