The Bigger Bang!

[PrinceMyshkin]

We speak of the “Big Bang”.
Could it have been any bigger than the one
when Seymour Sperm, the leader of the pack,
fastest swimmer of them all
or the only who paused to ask for directions,
ran into Evvie Egg,
and without so much as a by your leave
or a Howdy Ma’am, popped in,
bag and baggage,
and began to do his business there?

Will you ever know what that moment was like,
the first reaction of each to each?

Or even more unknowable
will you, could you know what was going on
before they ran into each other?

Or what if it had been, not Seymour,
but Steve who entered Edie
rather than Evvie?

And you might have ended up
someone altogether other!

[pussnboots]

cute
what made you write about this ?

[Sweets America]

Very nice poem, again thought-provoking! I love it, I love those kinds of poems that echo something deep.

[PrinceMyshkin]

cute
what made you write about this ?

Well, if you are a writer yourself then surely you know that one cannot always account for where one's ideas come from?

But I do speculate at times about the place of accident in the formation of one's identity - or what the aitch our 'identity' is anyway.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Very nice poem, again thought-provoking! I love it, I love those kinds of poems that echo something deep.

You might be seeing more in it than I intended. It was just my exploration of something that amused me - although of course even - and maybe especially - jokes often cloak something deeper.

[AuntShecky]

I don't if it's really prudent of me to admit this, but I "got"
the pun the title. This is cute, but be careful that the preciousness doesn't "jump the shark," so to speak, or "goes over the top." I liked it, but I could just hear some critic saying that your ditty is "twee," a term I really
deplore.
Also, it reminded me very much of the penultimate sequence in Woody Allen's "Everything You Always Wanted to Know About S*x But Were Afraid to Ask."

[pussnboots]

Well, if you are a writer yourself then surely you know that one cannot always account for where one's ideas come from?

But I do speculate at times about the place of accident in the formation of one's identity - or what the aitch our 'identity' is anyway.

I guess I have a dirty mind then

[PrinceMyshkin]

I guess I have a dirty mind then

Whether you have a "dirty" mind or not is not for me to judge except to say that if you do have such a one, I hope you enjoy it! But, honestly, there wasn't meant to be anything smirky about my poem!

[PrinceMyshkin]

I don't if it's really prudent of me to admit this, but I "got"
the pun the title.

Probably quite imprudent because, honestly, if you took the "bang" of the title as a slang synonym for sex, I didn't think of or intend i1!


This is cute,

You really do know how to hurt a guy because though I do catch myself being arch at times, I'd rather my writing be thought anything but "cute"!

[Sweets America]

You really do know how to hurt a guy because though I do catch myself being arch at times, I'd rather my writing be thought anything but "cute"!

I am afraid that you ARE cute, Schwee, this is a fact.:p

Oh, and about your reaction to my response, well I really felt something deeper in this poem, something almost scary which is sumed up in this exchange between us:

"I swear I felt something deeper in this poem, Jerry. I mean, what if I had been someone else??"
"What if you were already someone else?"
"Oh my God."
;)