Lonely Tears

[Pendragon]

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[PrinceMyshkin]

I appreciated the rhyming couplet at the end but found the occasional earlier ones something of an intrusion. And I'd rather have "soul" in preference to "very soul." I mean, soul is either the essence or it is not. Bugs me in the way "truly unique" does.

I also wish there were something of a hint as to the nature of the things that had gone wrong, or an instance of one of them. Hard to empathize with a generic collapse.