Would You?

[dibyendra]

If you see me crying lonely with my head on the knees,
would you hold me in your arms to cry on your shoulder?

If I fall from grace in this crazy world,
would you help me revive with a slap and pamper in your loving embrace again?

If I drift like a vagabond searching for shelter from the storm,
would you let me in your place when I knock your door?

When this life seems downing,
would you help me elevate again with full of desires?

If you find me staring on infinite stars in the middle of nowhere,
would you stand by me and hold my hands to take me home?

If this world make a huge leap and laugh at my weakness,
would you still wait for me
and tell me that you still love me in despite of my limitations?



Would you…? (Updated version. Please read this one. Comments Please...)


If you see me crying lonely,with my head on the knees,
would you hold me in your arms to cry on your shoulder?

If I fall from grace in this crazy world,
would you help me revive with a slap and pamper in your loving embrace again?

If I drift like a vagabond,searching for shelter from the storm,
would you let me into your place when I knock your door?

When this life seems downing and colours are fading,
would you help me elevate again with desires, enriched with full of colours?

If you find me staring at the infinite sky in the middle of nowhere,
would you stand by me and hold my hands to take me home?

If this world make a giant leap and laugh at my weakness,
would you still wait for me and tell me that you still love me in despite of my limitations?

Would you…?

[kiz_paws]

I liked the sentiment in this poem, the ending was very poignant. As well, I am always drawn to two line verses, the simplicity calls to me. :)

[PrinceMyshkin]

I love the directness of this, those brave questions! Your grammar is a bit shaky here & there. Do you know of someone in your neighbourhood who might proofread your things before you post them?

[Pendragon]

Brave wonderful poem...http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/GIJoe.gif

[dibyendra]

Thank you all for your comments. I'm glad to hear your views regarding this poem.


I liked the sentiment in this poem, the ending was very poignant. As well, I am always drawn to two line verses, the simplicity calls to me. :)

Thank you Kiz. I'm glad to hear that this poem touched your heart.



I love the directness of this, those brave questions! Your grammar is a bit shaky here & there. Do you know of someone in your neighbourhood who might proofread your things before you post them?

Thank you so much Prince for your view and alerting me. I didn't notice grammatical errors while posting. I'd improve from next time.


Brave wonderful poem...http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/GIJoe.gif

Thank you Pen for your appreciation. I'm glad that you loved this one.

[dibyendra]

Would you…?
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January 26, 2008

If you see me crying lonely,with my head on the knees,
would you hold me in your arms to cry on your shoulder?

If I fall from grace in this crazy world,
would you help me revive with a slap and pamper in your loving embrace again?

If I drift like a vagabond,searching for shelter from the storm,
would you let me into your place when I knock your door?

When this life seems downing and colours are fading,
would you help me elevate again with desires, enriched with full of colours?

If you find me staring at the infinite sky in the middle of nowhere,
would you stand by me and hold my hands to take me home?

If this world make a giant leap and laugh at my weakness,
would you still wait for me and tell me that you still love me in despite of my limitations?

Would you…?

[blazeofglory]

If you see me crying lonely with my head on the knees,
would you hold me in your arms to cry on your shoulder?

If I fall from grace in this crazy world,
would you help me revive with a slap and pamper in your loving embrace again?

If I drift like a vagabond searching for shelter from the storm,
would you let me in your place when I knock your door?

When this life seems downing,
would you help me elevate again with full of desires?

If you find me staring on infinite stars in the middle of nowhere,
would you stand by me and hold my hands to take me home?

If this world make a huge leap and laugh at my weakness,
would you still wait for me
and tell me that you still love me in despite of my limitations?



Would you…? (Updated version. Please read this one. Comments Please...)


If you see me crying lonely,with my head on the knees,
would you hold me in your arms to cry on your shoulder?

If I fall from grace in this crazy world,
would you help me revive with a slap and pamper in your loving embrace again?

If I drift like a vagabond,searching for shelter from the storm,
would you let me into your place when I knock your door?

When this life seems downing and colours are fading,
would you help me elevate again with desires enriched with full of colours?

If you find me staring at the infinite sky in the middle of nowhere,
would you stand by me and hold my hands to take me home?

If this world make a giant leap and laugh at my weakness,
would you still wait for me and tell me that you still love me in despite of my limitations?

Would you…?

Indeed deep tones of love. Of course your poem sets in the state, a lively state. One becomes transported to a world of love. That is the beauty of it.

[dibyendra]

Welcome back Blaze. A warm welcome to you again Blaze. Thank you so much for pouring your emotional view on this poem. After a long gap, this is one of the few poems written during this month. I'm really glad to hear from you after a long gap.