Flight

[CdnReader]

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Flight

Today I opened the window
to let in the breeze...
and instead of railway tracks,
traffic, and neighbouring rooftops,
I looked over a vast blue ocean.

I saw you on the horizon,
no more than a glisten really,
and I wondered if you were
paddling towards me...
or, like Icarus,
flying to the sun.

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[Sweets America]

Oh I like that, Cdn.:)
I love the image of the breeze entering through the window, I could feel it, and the ocean. I normally don't like the ocean, but here it felt pleasant.
I like the second stanza even if I am not sure how to interpret it.

[amanda_isabel]

great imagery, so aliiive, Cdn.

i loved the second stanza.

[PrinceMyshkin]

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Flight

Today I opened the window
to let in the breeze...
and instead of railway tracks,
traffic, and neighbouring rooftops,
I looked over a vast blue ocean.

I saw you on the horizon,
no more than a glisten really,
and I wondered if you were
paddling towards me...
or, like Icarus,
flying to the sun.

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Ouch! One remembers, of course, what happened when Icarus drew too close to the sun! Very good to see you back here and with such a wonderful poem.

[Sweets America]

Ouch! One remembers, of course, what happened when Icarus drew too close to the sun! Very good to see you back here and with such a wonderful poem.

Yes but I had trouble to apply that to the 'you' in the poem, whom I think is a lover. I have the idea that if he goes back to the speaker, he will be safe whereas if he flies away his fate willl obviously be dark, but I'm really not sure.

[CdnReader]

Thanks, Amanda. I'm glad you like it. :)

Jer, I'm happy to be back, even if it is momentary and short-lived. Hugs.

....and Sweets....


I like the second stanza even if I am not sure how to interpret it.

Sorry, can't help ya here. I never know how to interpret my own poems. I'm glad to let the reader have a go. ;)


Yes but I had trouble to apply that to the 'you' in the poem, whom I think is a lover. I have the idea that if he goes back to the speaker, he will be safe whereas if he flies away his fate willl obviously be dark, but I'm really not sure.

Perhaps a more interesting question is.... What makes you think it's a lover?

[ampoule]

Well, if I saw a man rowing towards me I'd be out on that beach starting a little fire. ;) ;)

Neat poem, Cdn.

[Pendragon]

The D shape is back in your poem, and a wonderful comparisson: sailing on an ocean of dreams or just about to crash and burn? Wow! :thumbs_up

[CdnReader]

Amp? Me too, m'dear, me too. :D

Thanks, Pen. Another in my ... ahem ... "signature style" .... :)

[blazeofglory]

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Flight

Today I opened the window
to let in the breeze...
and instead of railway tracks,
traffic, and neighbouring rooftops,
I looked over a vast blue ocean.

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Indeed this is exactly we are hemmed in, in a world where ideals and realities are things apart, and hardly they go together.

You have indeed caught up with glimpses of realities we all are hard stormed with in everyday life.

Love, no there is simply obsession
Environment, all pollutants
Life, all messed up

[dibyendra]

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I looked over a vast blue ocean.

I saw you on the horizon,
no more than a glisten really,
and I wondered if you were
paddling towards me...
or, like Icarus,
flying to the sun.

Icarus used here amused me a lot and that "paddling" and "flying to the sun" is everything here which is a height of imagination Cdn. Lovely poem. :thumbs_up

[CdnReader]

Thanks very much for your comments, Blaze and Dibyendra. :)

[NikolaiI]

That second stanza is really amazing and special - one of the most beautiful thoughts.. Incidentally, this was on my dad's birthday.