A Smoldering Passion...

[Tuninks]

I cannot believe what is happening to me.
I cannot believe that this is burning within me.
What once was a smoldering passion,
is now burning so bright...

I cannot see how you do this to me.
I cannot see how you cause this fire within me.
What was once a smoldering passion,
is now burning within me...

I cannot fathom this warmth.
I cannot fathom touching such a flame.
What was once a smoldering passion,
is now burning me alive...

[Tuninks]

I shut myself out,
I closed that door,
I locked down my heart,
I even stopped the very thought...

Then you came.

You sparked the thought,
You unlocked my heart,
You opened the door,
You let me in...

Then you left.

You left me alone,
The door wide open,
My heart unprotected from the cold,
Then I regret ever having the thought...

Then you never came back.

I shiver in the dark,
With the door wide open,
My heart frozen,
My thoughts as cold as my heart...

[Tuninks]

I smiled when I saw you, the day when it rained.
I only took a glance at the beauty that I saw.
I looked away in what felt like eternity,
then I looked away before you could see what I saw.

I laughed when we first talked, the day was uneventful,
At least for you, but for me it inspired.
I felt that warmth inside me, it grew with this flame.
Then we started talking again, you began to drive me insane.

I remembered this feeling, something I lost long ago.
I remembered this flame, something that should never have burned.
I closed my eyes and asked, when will it snuff out?
I felt so inspired without reason.

Now I sit and wonder,
What I did for this?
Why does this burn inside me?
Burn my heart till it is but a husk of black ash?

Why am I inspired without reason?

[Tuninks]

I lie in my bed, writing and typing,
hoping that this feeling will go away.
What was once passion, is now suffering and pain.
All I want it to do is go away...

This is not the time, nor is it the place.
I should feel this passion,
Make it go away!
Please, make it go away...

I feel this pressure, I feel this pain.
Its eating me up inside, its making me decay!
Please, help,
make this feeling go away...

I feel it in my chest, carving and cutting away,
It seeks a way out, typing and writing only makes it stay.
Please, help, answer this one question...
Why won't it go away?

[kiz_paws]

These are pretty heart-felt poems, Tuninks -- you really grip the emotion. I think that I liked "This Cannot Be!" the best. Why? The layout worked (four lines, one line, four lines, one line, etc.) -- I like touches like that. Also your last verse of that poem was quite gripping. Loved it. :thumbs_up

And WELCOME to LitNet, btw! :)

[Pendragon]

Good set of poems. I liked the first with its clever repetitions best, I think.
I second the welcome here, and keep writing poems like these!

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[Tuninks]

Thanks guys(or girls ^^) for the criticism. I'm sure I'll be spewing poetry out for a while, I have an inspiration that just won't go away...

[dibyendra]

I cannot believe what is happening to me.
I cannot believe that this is burning within me.
What once was a smoldering passion,
is now burning so bright...

I cannot see how you do this to me.
I cannot see how you cause this fire within me.
What was once a smoldering passion,
is now burning within me...

I cannot fathom this warmth.
I cannot fathom touching such a flame.
What was once a smoldering passion,
is now burning me alive...

I really liked this one Tuninks. It's such an passionate poem for me. Keep up your good work!:thumbs_up

[blazeofglory]

I cannot believe what is happening to me.
I cannot believe that this is burning within me.
What once was a smoldering passion,
is now burning so bright...

I cannot see how you do this to me.
I cannot see how you cause this fire within me.
What was once a smoldering passion,
is now burning within me...

I cannot fathom this warmth.
I cannot fathom touching such a flame.
What was once a smoldering passion,
is now burning me alive...

A flow of poignant and forceful emotion. You must be a very emotional person.

[Tuninks]

thanks all for all the critiquing :)