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ampoule
01-13-2008, 10:34 AM
Enough and To Spare

There is a wind in my sails today
and yes,
I feel puffed up,
and anything falling against me
would bounce away laughing,
but always wanting more of that
joy.

With this wind I move smoothly
from port to port,
collecting my pay for odd jobs
here and there,
and I take it and hide it
in little flowered boxes all around,

and later, when I need the scuttle
opened, to breathe sun and blue,
when there is no wind
and I lie bobbing, no place to go,
I will stretch out my arms,

and find one such flowered box
come to surface, and I will pry
open the forgotten treasure
and taste its bounty.

amp, January Thirteenth, TwoThousandEight

CdnReader
01-13-2008, 11:15 AM
Wonderful, Amp. Those "smooth sailing" days with the bright blue skies and the smiling wind are just the best. :)

Sweets America
01-13-2008, 12:45 PM
Ampoule, this is a refreshing poem, I like it.:) There is freedom in it. I love the phrase 'to breathe sun and blue'. I am not sure I love the ending as much as the rest, but I still think this is a nice poem. :)

PrinceMyshkin
01-13-2008, 01:23 PM
I must disagree with the dragon woman about the ending. I love that he box was a flowered one and that it returns at the end. But I heartily agree with Sweets' citation of the freedom in it. It feels like the least effortful of poems, almost a different genre from those where we struggle and fiddle and adjust...

Sweets America
01-13-2008, 02:02 PM
I must disagree with the dragon woman about the ending. I love that he box was a flowered one and that it returns at the end. But I heartily agree with Sweets' citation of the freedom in it. It feels like the least effortful of poems, almost a different genre from those where we struggle and fiddle and adjust...

Me, a dragon-woman?:D :p

I agree with what you say about the ending, I like the return of the box in the end, it is just that I didn't like the two last lines as much as the rest. I guess I was waiting for something more.

ShadowID
01-13-2008, 02:22 PM
If there was a clap emote, I'd put it right <here>.

But for now, I suppose I'll do this :thumbs_up :clap :thumbs_up

AuntShecky
01-14-2008, 11:58 AM
Yes, I like the theme of freedom in this, but we have
nautical themes "wind in my sails" mixed with the land-lubbing flower boxes. Or did I misunderstand and that the boxes are floating atop the sea?
In any event I liked the rhythm and movement in these lines.

kiz_paws
01-17-2008, 04:28 AM
The flowered box image for me was much like a message in a bottle, that was how I viewed it, at any rate.

I liked the way the poem read, complete with the blue writing -- very reminiscent of sea and sails...

Enjoyed it, amp!

NikolaiI
01-29-2015, 09:19 PM
This is one of the most beautiful poems. Truly. Dazzling and transcendental.

YesNo
01-30-2015, 10:41 AM
I enjoyed it also particularly breathing the "sun and blue", how opposition bounced away laughing, and how the flowered boxes were always there.