The beast in the water

[AlishaIsMyName]

I wrote this just now. It's very cliche. :P All comments welcome!

What is this beast?
This beast in the water?
This beast looking straight at me?
What is this beast I see?
The fire within it is getting hotter.
This strange beast.
This monster in the water.
Could it be me?
I'm catching It's fiery gaze.
Then again, I'm sure it's me.
It's anger great, It's spirit ablaze.
I unleashed it myself,
though I recall not where.
My head aches too much,
at the moment.
Wait! The monster is gone!
Now a more familiar reflection's there!
It's gone for now,
still surely later
I will unleash the beast again.

[ShadowID]

... It's very cliche.......

Why do you think it's cliche?

[white camellia]

It's very interesting to me in a way. Though it seems unreasonable, it has something to do with psychology artistically.

[AlishaIsMyName]

To ShadowID: It's cliche because there are many things like this that have been done before. :P

To white camelia: Thanks.

[AuntShecky]

The idea is good -- but in real life, actually seeing a "beast" would evoke a quicker response! It would be more of an "eek" and more urgent than the logical questions which the speaker evidently is calm enough to ask in the first lines.
Also, please try to fix the apostrophes. "It's" with an apostrophe is a contraction for "it is." The second line in the following excerpt the apostrophe is used correctly. In the other two lines, you don't need an apostrophe. "Its" (no apostrophe) is the form of the possessive pronoun which you intended.

I'm catching It's fiery gaze.
Then again, I'm sure it's me.
It's anger great, It's spirit ablaze