Endings

[TheFifthElement]

I don’t know where the story ends.
I flick back through the pages
of the book, searching
for the parts I missed until

my fingers are black and wrinkled,
like paper left out in a rainstorm.
Words slither helplessly into
the swirling drain, and I sense

a future as dry as my womb;
empty, like a story told too fast
where all the best bits happen
at the beginning, and in the end

there is nothing left to say.

[SleepyWitch]

wow, Fifth, I like it... for some reason I can relate to most of your poems, even though I don't know their background and you may have had something totally different in mind than what I read into them.
hehee, whatever the story, I suppose it ends the moment you wrote the poem http://www.freesmileys.org/smileys/confused009.gif (http://www.freesmileys.org) sorry, I'm not making too much sense today. I'd better go and write a collection of mystical aphorisms or something

[PrinceMyshkin]

Oh, no! I was so enraptured by this that when I arrived so abruptly at the end, I felt very much that this was



a story told too fast
where all the best bits happen
at the beginning, and in the end



And can you merely touch on something so poignant as the persona's "dry womb" without providing a bit more of her context? That feels like so intimate a reference that I would rather it were left out if we were not to be provided with a bit more to do with it.

But I don't want to end without mentioning your characteristic sure-footedness.

[SleepyWitch]

And can you merely touch on something so poignant as the persona's "dry womb" without providing a bit more of her context? That feels like so intimate a reference that I would rather it were left out if we were not to be provided with a bit more to do with it.


I'll second that.

[ampoule]

Oh fifth! I do this more and more, flicking back, searching. Amazing.

[Khe Iem]

I loved this one. Thanks for sharing. Khe Iem

[TheFifthElement]

Thanks everyone :)

Sleepy, I don't think it matters if you know the context of what the writer intended or not, sometimes the success in poetry comes in allowing the reader to step into what they think are your shoes, whether they are or not. Your comments suggest I may be getting somewhere, thank you so much for this.


Oh, no! I was so enraptured by this that when I arrived so abruptly at the end, I felt very much that this was

a story told too fast
where all the best bits happen
at the beginning, and in the end
And can you merely touch on something so poignant as the persona's "dry womb" without providing a bit more of her context? That feels like so intimate a reference that I would rather it were left out if we were not to be provided with a bit more to do with it.


Perhaps that was a page you skipped Jerry ;)

Thanks Ampoule as always for your kind comments :)

Khe Iem - thank you for reading, and welcome to the forums!

[blazeofglory]

A marvelous poem. I like the stuff and the form indeed!