Dust to Dust!

[mazHur]

This Earth is a Killer Wave !
by mazHur

Don't be proud of your beauty,sweet,
Your beauty is no more than a flicker of light,
a moment here, the next nowhere !
a flower that will bloom in spring
is fated to eternally roll in dust;
Many a rose that smiled before
and as many other beauteous flowers--
the Camelias, Peonies, Magnolias,Yuccas,Violets,
Lilies, Hawthorns---just to name a few that brightened the hearts
with their exuberant looks,
that nourished the fountain of love with joy,
that were adornments of the Devi of love ,
have left the garden and gulped by the hungry earth,
all gone dust to dust,
no more to be seen, no more to be relished with love;
Ah, what a stark fate for beauty and youth!
the few flowers that we see blooming in life's garden
are just a remembrance of the innumerable lost
to the un-satiated hunger of this voluptuous earth
always on the look out for young and beautiful things
for its irresistible subsistence and survival.
This earth is a killer wave !

[AuntShecky]

A pretty nice piece of work. I would make a couple of changes: shorten the catalogue (list) of flowers to just a couple; that way you really would be naming "just a few."
Also, I would expand a little bit about the killer whale. Some people find sea mammals in general and whales in particular to be objects of beauty themselves. The name might be a misnomer; killer whales are really not all that more vicious than other species.

But I get the point -- that those who are proud of their beauty are foolish, since that particular quality is short-lived.

[mazHur]

nice idea, thanks. Have done the necessary changes accordingly
best

[blazeofglory]

I am indeed familiar with your poems.I have read a lot.

Here I agree hundred percent with you in defining and of course confining love things. This is indeed a really nice one of course about love and the way we idealize it does not prove true regarding love.

Love is wave that sleeps down in a fraction of a second.

[crazefest456]

mazhur, I have no qualifications to say this (cuz I'm new to poetry) but i'll say this anyway:
I really loved the use of 'whale' (I know, I didn't comment on it before) because it gives such good, suitable underlying descriptions of the earth. How the killer whale has medicinal properties and how it's almost an endangered species because of the lack of prey, all seems to tie in with earth's role in your poem.
And

This Earth is a Killer Whale!
reminded of the starting of the song 'Bullet with Butterfly Wings' by Smashing Pumpkins (I hope I'm doing justice to your poem):

The world is a vampire, sent to drain
Secret destroyers, hold you up to the flames
And what do I get, for my pain?
Betrayed desires, and a piece of the game

I don't know, do you see what I mean?

[Riesa]

my first thought is I can't read it the font is too large
but I will go back and try to read what it is you are saying.

and what you are saying is..
nice, got it, heard it, very nice to remind us of some outdated...and lovely ideas


:D
I suggest to branch out. or else sing.

[Riesa]

mazhur, I have no qualifications to say this (cuz I'm new to poetry) but i'll say this anyway:
I really loved the use of 'whale' (I know, I didn't comment on it before) because it gives such good, suitable underlying descriptions of the earth. How the killer whale has medicinal properties and how it's almost an endangered species because of the lack of prey, all seems to tie in with earth's role in your poem.
And

reminded of the starting of the song 'Bullet with Butterfly Wings' by Smashing Pumpkins (I hope I'm doing justice to your poem):


I don't know, do you see what I mean?


:lol:

[crazefest456]

:lol:

:D I know, I'm too goofy...