Solstice '99

[AuntShecky]

Solstice '99

Stuck in the corner of Capricorn,
the sun seems immobile in glue --
or frozen, perhaps, paralyzed
in a crystalline block of blue.
Quick days deign to endow us
a tentative peek: shy, sly,
out from the bottom of the blanket
a mere pin point in the sky.
The Yule fires up hope from darkness,
this temporary, temporal fear.
The Light of the World brings solace
in the eternal turn of the year.


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[mazHur]

Solstice '99

Stuck in the corner of Capricorn,
the sun seems immobile in glue --
or frozen, perhaps, paralyzed
in a crystalline block of blue.
Quick days deign to endow us
a tentative peek: shy, sly,
out from the bottom of the blanket
a mere pin point in the sky.
The Yule fires up hope from darkness,
this temporary, temporal fear.
The Light of the World brings solace
in the eternal turn of the year.


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recommend:
2ND LINE: 'sunk in glue''
3rd line: ''numb' instead of 'paralyzed'

excellent rhythmic. rhyming verse !

[PrinceMyshkin]

It seems tricky to me these days or even morally dubious to use such elevated or literary language as

crystalline...deign... temporary, temporal...



But no! You do it all so gracefully, with such a balance between the sentiments expressed here and the decorous language, that your evident love of the nobility of language becomes part and parcel of the 'message' of the poem!


Glaedelig Jul!
Glad Yule!
Vrolijk kerstfeest
Boas Festas!
Hauskaa Joulua!
Joyeux Noel!


I know - it is the solstice you’re saluting, but still.. (In any case, I'm a Jew!)

[firefangled]

Loved the flow and the sound of this. I wouldn't change a thing.

[symphony]

very nicely done, Auntie, neat. :nod: