Who Will Weep For Me?

[Biggus]

WHO WILL WEEP FOR ME?

Who will weep for me?
When the pain ends
Who will cry for me?
No Family or friends

Who will even notice?
When I am at peace
Who will weep for me?
At my merciful release

Who at my absence
Will shed a single tear
Who will even notice?
Not a single soul I fear

Will angels come for me?
When the pain ends
Or an apostate of hell
To see my soul descends

Angels will come for me
At the time of my release
There will be no tears
When I am then at peace

Who will mourn the loss?
Of a lonely non entity
Who will even express?
Feelings of sympathy

Who will weep for me?
When the pain ends
Who will cry for me?
As my soul ascends

Don’t mourn the loss
Of a lonely non entity
I have eternal peace
At last with my deity

[PrinceMyshkin]

WHO WILL WEEP FOR ME?

Who will weep for me?
When the pain ends
Who will cry for me?
No Family or friends

Who will even notice?
When I am at peace
Who will weep for me?
At my merciful release

Who at my absence
Will shed a single tear
Who will even notice?
Not a single soul I fear

Will angels come for me?
When the pain ends
Or an apostate of hell
To see my soul descends

Angels will come for me
At the time of my release
There will be no tears
When I am then at peace

Who will mourn the loss?
Of a lonely non entity
Who will even express?
Feelings of sympathy

Who will weep for me?
When the pain ends
Who will cry for me?
As my soul ascends

Don’t mourn the loss
Of a lonely non entity
I have eternal peace
At last with my deity


It's a heartfelt and moving poem & perhaps the two references to your soul prepare us for the end (they might certainly do so for a practicing deist) but for one like me, it comes as too sudden and convenient an ending.

And an agnostic or someone hostile to theism might be prompted to ask, if your deity has allowed to to be so lonely in this life, why would you be sure of being at peace with him in the hereafter?

Theology aside, in order for the poem to work, evidence of or reference to the deity needs to have been part of the structure of the poem earlier on.

[Pendragon]

One might also ask
If you are a non entity
Why are you even certain
That there even is a deity?

[AuntShecky]

Pen, did you write this?:

One might also ask
If you are a non entity
Why are you even certain
That there even is a deity?
________________

If so, it's great. Brevity, as it is said, is the soul of wit.
And your quatrain is SO true. There are blowhards who swear (to Whom?) that there is no God, and just as many who believe that their Straight path and Narrow gate is the ONLY one to take. To my mind, both monolithic positions
are nothing if they aren't arrogance of the first order.

[PrinceMyshkin]

One might also ask
If you are a non entity
Why are you even certain
That there even is a deity?

But the less I am
The more tempting it is to imagine
The greatness of that
Which is not me.

[jon1jt]

How can a non-entity be lonely?? I think I see what you're trying to do, but...um...well...

I couldn't help be stopped by the question, "Who will even notice/ when I am at peace"
How's about the speaker?

'At last with my deity'


Ah, I get it, don't live in this world, live in that other world because that world because that's the real world and this world, this life isn't real.