Discouragement

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DISCOURAGEMENT


It clamored up my walk

And fretted at my door

Then groped about my windows,

It's shadows spectral were.


I spied its grim reflection

In a serving tray;

Then turned me soft around and smiled:

It turned and fled away.

[Virgil]

Reminds me of Emily Dickenson. I like it. Nicely done.

[PrinceMyshkin]

DISCOURAGEMENT


It clamored up my walk

And fretted at my door

Then groped about my windows,

It's shadows spectral were.


I spied its grim reflection

In a serving tray;

Then turned me soft around and smiled:

It turned and fled away.

My God! Someone could surely make a poem (heck, an epic) out of all the words you DON'T use, but I suspect it wouldn't be one-tenth as witty as this.

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Thanks for reading and for taking a minute to comment; the positive encouragement is nourishing and filling.

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[blazeofglory]

DISCOURAGEMENT


It clamored up my walk

And fretted at my door

Then groped about my windows,

It's shadows spectral were.


I spied its grim reflection

In a serving tray;

Then turned me soft around and smiled:

It turned and fled away.

Indeed it is marvelous. This is a poem, and presents what poetic is very profoundly indeed!!! What a great imagination!! caught up me!

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Thanks for reading, Blaze, and for your kind comments.

[B-Mental]

beautiful, I wouldn't change a thing.

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Thanks B; I'll leave it right there!

[jon1jt]

I dig it, smooth, flowing. I'm with Virge, it's Emily-esque, definitely! Really nice, way to go.

[ampoule]

I like it too.

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I'm sure you will agree that it's fun to share poems, more fun when they are read, and really fun when someone enjoys them!

Thanks for making this forum fun!