This human-being thing

[PrinceMyshkin]

with appreciation to The FifthElement



Remember that poem you wrote
when you thought,
“Yes, I can do this poetry thing!”

Or the time you made love
without wondering whether your hands
were supposed to go here
or there? And you thought, afterwards,
“Yes, I can do this love-making thing!”

Or when, after nine seemingly interminable months
you popped out your first child and thought,
“Yes, I can do this child-bearing thing!”

And has the moment yet arrived
when you or I can think:
“Yes, I can do this human being thing!”

[TheFifthElement]

:lol: :lol: I like it!

[Sweets America]

I love this, Jer! I really love it!! I just have one question: why can't I write poems like that? Eh? :p

[dibyendra]

Cool..I loved this one Prince. Last line is bold one hehe.

[CdnReader]

.

It seems I've been
to hell-n-back...
headfirst through the raging of the world,
tumbling crazy into the dark abyss
where dragons feast on the flesh
of those less courageous.

I've rescued my soul from destruction
on more than one occasion....
only to turn and find
another obstacle awaiting beyond.
My cindered spirit has been pierced
with swords of desolation....
and yet I've picked myself up from the
lowly ground of my defeat
and carried my pain through
the next gate.

I've disappointed those I love
and shocked those that I don't....
but I've always left a shining trail that
well describes the sincerity of my intentions
and my quest for integrity.

For what else can I ever be
but this weakly broken, yet ever-trying
human being?

.

[ampoule]

Yes! :)

[PrinceMyshkin]

Yes! :)

How beautiful! Is this "yes" to life? Or are you quoting from the end of Ulysses?

[PrinceMyshkin]

.

It seems I've been
to hell-n-back...
headfirst through the raging of the world,
tumbling crazy into the dark abyss
where dragons feast on the flesh
of those less courageous.

I've rescued my soul from destruction
on more than one occasion....
only to turn and find
another obstacle awaiting beyond.
My cindered spirit has been pierced
with swords of desolation....
and yet I've picked myself up from the
lowly ground of my defeat
and carried my pain through
the next gate.

I've disappointed those I love
and shocked those that I don't....
but I've always left a shining trail that
well describes the sincerity of my intentions
and my quest for integrity.

For what else can I ever be
but this weakly broken, yet ever-trying
human being?

.


Oh! This is magnificent except for "yet ever-trying" which is just explanatory and interferes with the more poignant implied contradiction between "weakly broken" and "human being" which are stronger if in tighter juxtaposition.

[PanzaFan]

A thought provoking poem mainly because although I have said these very things, I also have great reason to doubt wheather I do most of them very well, yet I am inspired. In my opinion both poems are good. Although they each awaken something cowardly within me.

[blazeofglory]

This poem is really really moving, and of course very deepening. It gives something that has to do with life, and entirely with life.

It speaks of everyday reality and things that happen everyday to all, but to put them in a beautiful poem like this proves the technicality of the poet, indeed to compose a beautiful poem like this.

[amanda_isabel]

liked the poems guys :)

[SleepyWitch]

with appreciation to The FifthElement



Remember that poem you wrote
when you thought,
“Yes, I can do this poetry thing!”

Or the time you made love
without wondering whether your hands
were supposed to go here
or there? And you thought, afterwards,
“Yes, I can do this love-making thing!”

Or when, after nine seemingly interminable months
you popped out your first child and thought,
“Yes, I can do this child-bearing thing!”

And has the moment yet arrived
when you or I can think:
“Yes, I can do this human being thing!”




as a certified alien, I feel discriminated against by your poem :D

[PrinceMyshkin]

as a certified alien, I feel discriminated against by your poem :D

You presume to consider yourself an "alien" when you have not yet made it to strange!

[CdnReader]

Oh! This is magnificent except for "yet ever-trying" which is just explanatory and interferes with the more poignant implied contradiction between "weakly broken" and "human being" which are stronger if in tighter juxtaposition.

Thanks for this, Jer. I agree. :)

[SleepyWitch]

You presume to consider yourself an "alien" when you have not yet made it to strange!

on a more serious note, I like this poem. although my personal answer to the last question would probably be "no", if you can answer the first 3 with yes, that probably means the answer to the last one should be "yes", too. it sounds kinda hopeful even though there is some ambiguity