Wintry Nights

[dibyendra]

Winter Nights (Updated Version, please read this one)

The frigid touch of the wintry nights,
how it steals life of the streets earlier
leaving streets desolated in chilled air
till the sunlight strikes once again
piercing blankets of haze.
An affectionate touch of the morning sunshine
on the gelid skin of the Earth
beckons lives on the Earth
once again to it's warm embrace.

Stationary and lonely streetlights,
traffic signals, and bright animated advertisings,
they just keep on gleaming,
flashing, and animating silently,
execute their chores barely all night long
in the cold and empty street.

Inert deciduous trees,
they endure throughout winter being denuded,
although being afflicted by the frosty nights,
still their root anchor deep on Earth,
yearn to breathe the spring air and bloom once again.



Winter Nights (Old Version)

The frigid touch of the wintry nights,
how it ends life of the streets soon,
leaves streets desolated in chilled air
till the morning sunlight arrive piercing impediments,
caress the Earth again,
beckoning lives on the Earth once again to it's warm embrace.

Poor stationary and lonely streetlights,
traffic signals, and bright animated advertisings,
they just keep on gleaming,
flashing, and animating silently,
execute their chores barely in the cold and empty street.

Inert deciduous trees,
endure throughout winter being denuded,
although being afflicted by the frosty nights,
still their root anchor deep on Earth,
hoping to breathe the spring air and bloom once again.

- Dibyendra Hyoju
November 28, 2007

[dibyendra]

Any comments please ?

[ampoule]

I especially like this stanza and the part about them executing their chores barely. It has an eerie feeling to it for some reason, for me.




Poor stationary and lonely streetlights,
traffic signals, and bright animated advertisings,
they just keep on gleaming,
flashing, and animating silently,
execute their chores barely in the cold and empty street.

[dibyendra]

Thank you Amp for your comment ! Yes, Indeed, when we see the silent and lonely lampposts, stop signs, and animated lights in the silent and cold night, they generate different emotions and I'm glad you loved what I wrote.

[dibyendra]

I worked again mostly on first stanza, and few modification on second and third stanza. Any suggestions, critics, comments are welcome.


Winter Nights

The frigid touch of the wintry nights,
how it steals life of the streets earlier
leaving streets desolated in chilled air
till the sunlight strikes once again
piercing blankets of haze.
An affectionate touch of the morning sunshine
on the gelid skin of the Earth
beckons lives on the Earth
once again to it's warm embrace.

Stationary and lonely streetlights,
traffic signals, and bright animated advertisings,
they just keep on gleaming,
flashing, and animating silently,
execute their chores barely all night long
in the cold and empty street.

Inert deciduous trees,
they endure throughout winter being denuded,
although being afflicted by the frosty nights,
still their root anchor deep on Earth,
yearn to breathe the spring air and bloom once again.

Thank you !

Best,
Dibyendra

[blazeofglory]

You seem to have really observed the pains the poor go through and of course you can go very deeply.

[dibyendra]

Thank you Blaze for your comment. And indeed yes, I could have written something different deeply but before that it turned out be this one :).