my poem An Eye

[c_ky_6]

hey this is my first poem so plz give me feed back

An Eye

In space so far

We think your a star

Im in a bed under that star

So i have to look far

I relize your so high

You look like an eye

you come so rarely

We see you barely

I have to sigh

Because your the GOD'S EYE

[Sweets America]

hey this is my first poem so plz give me feed back

An Eye

In space so far

We think you're a star

I'm in a bed under that star

So i have to look far

I realize you're so high

You look like an eye

you come so rarely

We see you barely

I have to sigh

Because you're the GOD'S EYE

Hello Hello. Welcome to the forums. :)
I think I prefer the first two lines of your poem, and maybe the last two lines as well. Though, maybe you could elaborate a little? Oh, I have proposed some corrections in red. Keep on writing! :)

[c_ky_6]

thanks