A rather childish fancy

[trippy star]

Lies

Oh fishy fish fish!
Pitter pattering about
Flipper flappering about
Lost
In the stream.

Oh beaver beave-beaver!
Eating the fishy fish fish,
As it pitter patters about
Flipper flaps about
Lost
In the stream.

Now the beaver beave-beaver,
Who eats the fishy fish fish
Wanders like a wisp
In the stream,
Same as the fishy fish fish
Lost.

And now the beaver beave-beaver
Builds his hobbly hobble house
Which wanders and waives about,
Like the fishy fish fish
In the stream
Lost.

Any thoughts or critisicisms?

[PrinceMyshkin]

Lots of fun but I do wish that bloody beaver had spared the poor fish!

[trippy star]

Here is another i recently wrote, about being alone, which isn't quite lonliness.

To Be Alone (Creativity):

I feel terrible
Like a blossoming butterfly
Who yet longs to linger a caterpillar.

I feel wonderful
Dismissing past grievances,
Loftily gliding upon the zephyrs careless boughs.

I feel terrible
As my words deliver no meaning I want,
Meet no conventions of rhythm or rhyme.

I feel wonderful-
Empowered, justly unforgiven;
Freed from the shackled schedules of uncaring history.
I feel terrible.
I feel wonderful.

Any comments? criticisms?