I am invaded

[blazeofglory]

You see I was born pure and immaculate
Unlearned of your manners and mores and etiquettes
I was as wild as a lamb
Frolicking and rolicking following my insticnts
Now I am a prisoner of your ideas
You conditioned me to suit your requirments
You mothered and fathered me
And at the expense a little warmth and security
I did a big deal with you like Dr. Faustos
In return all I got is buckets of stresses and anxieties

The whole mountain was my abode
The whole jungle was my farm
You walled and debarred me from living my way

Of course you have fulfilled me and everything I got
But to be doomed and and shrink only

[white camellia]

I like this, blazeofglory. It sounds so familiar and true.

[dibyendra]

You see I was born pure and immaculate
Unlearned of your manners and mores and etiquettes
I was as wild as a lamb
Frolicking and rolicking following my insticnts
Now I am a prisoner of your ideas
You conditioned me to suit your requirments
You mothered and fathered me
And at the expense a little warmth and security
I did a big deal with you like Dr. Faustos
In return all I got is buckets of stresses and anxieties

The whole mountain was my abode
The whole jungle was my farm
You walled and debarred me from living my way

Of course you have fulfilled me and everything I got
But to be doomed and and shrink only

This poem speaks the pain or frustration of yours Blaze and you seemed to be shackled by dos and don'ts. Relationship is quite complex in which we have to balance all the human generated emotions.

Blaze, I found few spelling errors which sometimes misinterpret the meaning of the poem. That is not a big thing which we usually make these kind of errors but when omitted, message from poem will be much clear without puzzling reader's brain ;)

Quite nice work Blaze ! :thumbs_up

And I remember the time when I had similar kind of feelings like yours and I would like to share the poem which I have written during that moment. Actually, at first I had written this poem in Nepali (http://dibyendra.blogspot.com/2007/09/blog-post.html) which I translated into English to share in this huge network. Here it goes :


Relationship

Relationship relies on trust, not on promises.
Promises may be the cage made of glass.
They can get shattered anytime into fragments.
That relation cannot move any further by gluing together...

Relationship is impressed on commitment, not in moments of togetherness.
Moments of togetherness may become sparks raised from doubts.
They may turn into blaze anytime
which always cannot be extinguished...

Relationship flourishes in patience, not in haste.
Haste may become a blow of the storm.
It calms down only after a severe destruction
which cannot be undone again...

Relationship is written in heart, not in the form of words.
Written words may just remain bounded only to the words.
They may easily get faded
which when written cannot build a relation again...

Relationship lives in transparency of feelings, not in pretense.
Pretense shows different face covering the reflections of real feelings.
It comes to end anytime showing it's real face.
That relation always cannot be started again after the end.

Relationship is the union of souls, not of bodies.
Union of bodies may just be an illusion.
Any force may compel helplessly to kneel
which cannot be thought that wailing will unify the relation again...

- Dibyendra Hyoju
September 13, 2007




With Love,
Dibyendra

[ampoule]

I like your poem Blaze. It is a curious thing, what we would each be like had we not been invaded by others.