In My Birthday

[dibyendra]

As my birthday is approaching very near, I thought to write something which I have never made an attempt before my birthday. Here it goes :

In My Birthday

Before my birthday,
I'll gaze my own reflection
to feel how much I have evolved
comparing with my old photograph.
I'll turn off the light
to search myself
to sense if I could still
feel the way I used to feel.
And I'll cry with tears of joy
knowing I'm still alive...

In my birthday,
I will tell mother "Your son turned 27".
And I'll tell her
"Ma, give me a tender kiss ,
embrace me warmly
to feel your son with your finger tips".
And I'll cry once again with tears of joy
knowing I'm still alive...
To hear lullaby
and the tender touch
of your loving hands on my face,
I desire to sleep in your lap ma
once again just like I used to do
when I was little boy.

Before that night,
I'll request blanket of clouds to rain
to feel if I could still feel
the frigidness of November rain.
And I'll cry once again with tears of joy
knowing I'm still alive...
I'll invite Stars, planets, and the moon
into that endless open sky
and request them to appear
with gleaming dress
illuminating shimmering light for me that night.
Family and friends,
I won't expect anything else from you all...
Your presence is just all I need...
Just stay with me in that moment,
wish me to be alive,
and whisper "Happy Birthday Dibyendra !"
We'll definitely dance that night
sharing the beauty of this Universe
with drinks in our hand.
And I'll cry once again with tears of joy
knowing I'm still alive...

Thank you !
With Love,
Dibyendra

[white camellia]

to feel how much I have evolved
comparing with my old photograph.

to sense if I could still
feel the way I used to feel.

And I'll cry with tears of joy
knowing I'm still alive...

In my birthday,
I will tell mother "Your son turned 27".
And I'll tell her
"Ma, give me a tender kiss ,
embrace me warmly
to feel your son with your finger tips".
And I'll cry once again with tears of joy
knowing I'm still alive...
To hear lullaby
and the tender touch
of your loving hands on my face,
I desire to sleep in your lap ma
once again just like I used to do
when I was little boy.

Before that night,
I'll request blanket of clouds to rain
to feel if I could still feel
the frigidness of November rain.
This is very touching, especially the lines about you and your mother (Someone said that 'mother' is the only woman that a man will never betray), which relates well with the theme, the gratitude for being alive. Birthday to us is an invisible mark, not as that of a tree.
I wish you a happy birthday, dibyendra.

[blazeofglory]

This is very touching, especially the lines about you and your mother (Someone said that 'mother' is the only woman that a man will never betray), which relates well with the theme, the gratitude for being alive. Birthday to us is an invisible mark, not as that of a tree.
I wish you a happy birthday, dibyendra.

Of course he is deeepening the 'Feel' of a boy, a gullible boy despite maturing with time. This is a rare and of course rich feeling that vitalizes life. He is indeed a poet of passion and compassion and i feel he has a profound potential to be a writer, reading the depth he has plunded throuch versification.

[ampoule]

In My Birthday

Before my birthday,
I'll gaze my own reflection
to feel how much I have evolved
comparing with my old photograph.
I'll turn off the light
to search myself
[B]to sense if I could still
feel the way I used to feel.
And I'll cry with tears of joy
knowing I'm still alive...



I really really REALLY like this stanza.

[dibyendra]

This is very touching, especially the lines about you and your mother (Someone said that 'mother' is the only woman that a man will never betray), which relates well with the theme, the gratitude for being alive. Birthday to us is an invisible mark, not as that of a tree.
I wish you a happy birthday, dibyendra.

Thank you "white camellia" for your such an emotional and wonderful comment and thank you for wishing me for my upcoming birthday ! And I'm glad to hear that this one made you emotional. And I agree with your comment "white camellia". Yes, 'Mother' is the women to whom everyone keeps in their heart all their life, but not intending to isolate father, as parents have equal contribution while raising a child but still 'Mother' is the only women with whom there is a special bond which makes one remember how she nurtured him/her from the cradle to the state of youth.



Of course he is deeepening the 'Feel' of a boy, a gullible boy despite maturing with time. This is a rare and of course rich feeling that vitalizes life. He is indeed a poet of passion and compassion and i feel he has a profound potential to be a writer, reading the depth he has plunded throuch versification.

Thank you Blaze for your appreciation !
Actually, I write poem but not often and depends upon emotions that rise and fall in the course of time and I love to pour my emotions by mingling words and portray them into the form of poem. I'm glad that you loved this one as well. Poetry has been my passion and I love to spend some of time writing poems whenever I get time to write but again depends upon moods.

Thanks once again Blaze for your wonderful comment and appreciation. I'm waiting for your new poem Blaze.


Of course he is deeepening the 'Feel' of a boy, a gullible boy despite maturing with time.
Oh really ? ;) Thank you Blaze...



I really really REALLY like this stanza.
I'm glad to hear from you again in this poem Amp. Thank you for your comment ! So, what do you think about the poem in overall ?

I read your poem "Colors" and that was wonderful Amp. As I was busy for most of the week, I couldn't post comment in to your "Colors" thread. As, I'm loaded with lots of office works, I couldn't post my comments. I will definitely do that soon.

Thank you all for your comment !

With love,
Dibyendra

[dibyendra]

If there had been no title for this poem, what title would you suggest for this poem ? Should I use just "My Birthday" or just "Birthday" as a title ? Kindly post your suggestions.

Thank you all !

With love,
Dibyendra

[TheFifthElement]

You're definitely finding your voice Dibyendra - again this poem develops really nicely and towards the end there's some fantastic language and imagery. I wonder if the poem would be more powerful if you made it in the present tense - i.e. as though you were writing it now, and now is the day before your birthday, for example :

"Before my birthday,
I gaze at my own reflection,
feel how much I have evolved
compared with my old photograph.
I turn off the light
to search myself
to sense if I can still
feel the way I used to feel.
And I cry with tears of joy
knowing I'm still alive..."

So it's more of a 'this is what I'm doing', as opposed to 'this is what I will do'. For you to decide, of course, whichever you think is best.

For a title, oh titles are always difficult aren't they? 'Birthday' seems to fit fine, though with the theme running through the poem ' Alive' would work also. Of course you could always come up with something a little more obscure...

When is the big day? A big Lit-net birthday hug from me, whenever it is :D

[dibyendra]

You're definitely finding your voice Dibyendra - again this poem develops really nicely and towards the end there's some fantastic language and imagery. I wonder if the poem would be more powerful if you made it in the present tense - i.e. as though you were writing it now, and now is the day before your birthday, for example :

"Before my birthday,
I gaze at my own reflection,
feel how much I have evolved
compared with my old photograph.
I turn off the light
to search myself
to sense if I can still
feel the way I used to feel.
And I cry with tears of joy
knowing I'm still alive..."

So it's more of a 'this is what I'm doing', as opposed to 'this is what I will do'. For you to decide, of course, whichever you think is best.

For a title, oh titles are always difficult aren't they? 'Birthday' seems to fit fine, though with the theme running through the poem ' Alive' would work also. Of course you could always come up with something a little more obscure...

When is the big day? A big Lit-net birthday hug from me, whenever it is :D

Thank you so much Fifth for your comment ! I appreciate your idea Fifth. Actually, My birthday is on Nov 20 and I have written this poem yesterday. Definitely, a first stanza specially, would have been better if expressed in present tense rather than in future tense. Isn't that so Fifth ?

And for title, I loved the title "Alive". Thank you so much Fifth for suggesting a title. Much appreciated your comment ! :thumbs_up

Love,
Dibyendra

[dibyendra]

Any more comment before my Nov 20 birthday ? :)

[dibyendra]

Today, here in this Planet is Nov 20 and Sun is about to rise but hidden somewhere in the winter haze hehe. Just thought to remind you all that today is my birthday. hehe :)

With Love,
Dibyendra

[TheFifthElement]

Hi dibyendra - happy birthday to you :)

[dibyendra]

Hi dibyendra - happy birthday to you :)

Thanks Fifth for coming back here again to wish me in my birthday ! :)

With Love,
Dibyendra

[firefangled]

I like birthdays, Dibyendra. They are all important, as if creation begins again with each one. So I wish you
HAPPY BIRTHDAY !!!!


Birthday of the Poet as a Young Man
- to Dibyendra on his Birthday

Will you forge the remainder of your life caught in fire,
or will you ascend on wings to where the ethereal
elements are shaped by matter becoming spirit?

In the mirror is the labyrinth, eyes reflecting eyes,
is this not where the line of eternity lies, a perception
within a perception? Nor is it a perception of sight,

but a knowing of how a thought rises in the pool,
you can see it with its emissaries of air, and becomes
a word like moonlight, a mystery within a science.

Look at it for what it is, dead rock, borrowing the sun.
Watch it change as you try to feel the universe revolving,
you lying motionless on a hillside, picture gravity’s net,

try to feel it pulling you out of the sky to the green grass.
Then quietly watch the silver lake or its crescent tide,
know then, it is for beauty we are born and why we try.

[ampoule]

Today, here in this Planet is Nov 20 and Sun is about to rise but hidden somewhere in the winter haze hehe. Just thought to remind you all that today is my birthday. hehe :)

With Love,
Dibyendra

Yes, happy day to you diby!! I hope your favorite wishes come true.

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[dibyendra]

I like birthdays, Dibyendra. They are all important, as if creation begins again with each one. So I wish you
HAPPY BIRTHDAY !!!!


Birthday of the Poet as a Young Man
- to Dibyendra on his Birthday

Will you forge the remainder of your life caught in fire,
or will you ascend on wings to where the ethereal
elements are shaped by matter becoming spirit?

In the mirror is the labyrinth, eyes reflecting eyes,
is this not where the line of eternity lies, a perception
within a perception? Nor is it a perception of sight,

but a knowing of how a thought rises in the pool,
you can see it with its emissaries of air, and becomes
a word like moonlight, a mystery within a science.

Look at it for what it is, dead rock, borrowing the sun.
Watch it change as you try to feel the universe revolving,
you lying motionless on a hillside, picture gravity’s net,

try to feel it pulling you out of the sky to the green grass.
Then quietly watch the silver lake or its crescent tide,
know then, it is for beauty we are born and why we try.

Thank you so much for your warm wishes and for such a wonderful poem for me firefangled. This poem is such a wonderful gift for me in my birthday !

Thanking you once again Fire !!!

With Love,
Dibyendra

[dibyendra]

Yes, happy day to you diby!! I hope your favorite wishes come true.

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I'm glad to hear from you once again in this thread. Thank you ampoule for your warm wishes in my birthday !

With Love,
Dibyendra