Tonight-waiting for your comments!

[Pretty^Athens]

Tonight…I'm feeling my…
Potions…
I just can't stop
My active imagination…
Or my running hormones…
I'm still awake…
Thinking of your killing touches
And your hypnozing looks and whispers…
All night long…
I've been thinking
Of your hot bare skin
Touching mine…
And your lovely powerful fingers…
Playing with my hair and neck…
I've been dying…
Imagining our first kiss…
Wild, wet, gentle kiss…
Teaching me how sweet
You lips taste…
I've been dying…
Imagining that only you and me…
Are standing on a high mount…
Hanging and hugging
And you giving me sweet painful bites…
Kissing me gentle kisses…
Kissing me ear…my eyes…
My neck, my hands….
And my cheeks…
And then…
While I'm dying in your arms…
You're just playing with my lips…
Touching them…
Kissing them…
And biting them…
And suddenly…
While we're sinking into
An ocean of love and…lust
You're putting my tiny head
On your beating heart…
To hear it…
And to feel your boiling blood
Running into your loving heart…
And then…
While the cute silver moon
Is watching us proudely…
To say goodbye…
You'r putting your arms on my shoulders…
Feeling we're only one soul
That parted in two bodies…
And kissing me one last kiss…
That'll mark my lips for ever…

[andrew23]

Oh my, that's so romantic, I felt it tingle in my bones.

[Pretty^Athens]

:) glad to hear!
thanks for your comment!

[andrew23]

just by reading your work, i felt like falling in love..

damn, that was powerful..

[dibyendra]

Tonight…I'm feeling my…
Potions…
I just can't stop
My active imagination…
Or my running hormones…
I'm still awake…
Thinking of your killing touches
And your hypnozing looks and whispers…
All night long…
I've been thinking
Of your hot bare skin
Touching mine…
And your lovely powerful fingers…
Playing with my hair and neck…
I've been dying…
Imagining our first kiss…
Wild, wet, gentle kiss…
Teaching me how sweet
You lips taste…
I've been dying…
Imagining that only you and me…
Are standing on a high mount…
Hanging and hugging
And you giving me sweet painful bites…
Kissing me gentle kisses…
Kissing me ear…my eyes…
My neck, my hands….
And my cheeks…
And then…
While I'm dying in your arms…
You're just playing with my lips…
Touching them…
Kissing them…
And biting them…
And suddenly…
While we're sinking into
An ocean of love and…lust
You're putting my tiny head
On your beating heart…
To hear it…
And to feel your boiling blood
Running into your loving heart…
And then…
While the cute silver moon
Is watching us proudely…
To say goodbye…
You'r putting your arms on my shoulders…
Feeling we're only one soul
That parted in two bodies…
And kissing me one last kiss…
That'll mark my lips for ever…

Pretty^Athens, this is really a romantic poem of yours. I enjoyed reading this one. :)

[Pretty^Athens]

just by reading your work, i felt like falling in love..

damn, that was powerful..

oh that's a lovely thing to hear... never knew my work'de be that powerful!
Thanks!


Pretty^Athens, this is really a romantic poem of yours. I enjoyed reading this one. :)

Thanks :) glad to know you enjoy reading it!

[Pendragon]

Romantic, bording on the exotic but never crossing the line. Shows that one can write about romantic experiences without resort to absolute naughtiness! You turn it in to something beautiful, which is what it should be, at the same time admitting to a bit of lust, not just love. Excellent!

Pen

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[Pretty^Athens]

:D thanks! i'm glad you like my work!

[Pretty^Athens]

come on guys, what else do you think of it?

[jon1jt]

A little poem which touches on a big subject with hope and conviction. The first 6-8 lines are lively, playful. by the middle i've become slightly dissatisfied---the bites, the kisses, the gentle kisses, bah bum bah bum bah bum... there is overexplanation and in the end the sexual energies never actualize, only blase description, statements of a real experience, which, for the poet was sacred and valuable. i see this as a springboard to something tighter, mysterious.

[symphony]

come on guys, what else do you think of it?
My thoughts while i read it was- "cute, but too hackneyed in theme and phrases". No offence meant.

[Pretty^Athens]

A little poem which touches on a big subject with hope and conviction. The first 6-8 lines are lively, playful. by the middle i've become slightly dissatisfied---the bites, the kisses, the gentle kisses, bah bum bah bum bah bum... there is overexplanation and in the end the sexual energies never actualize, only blase description, statements of a real experience, which, for the poet was sacred and valuable. i see this as a springboard to something tighter, mysterious.

hey jon, thanks for your reply,
Well yeah maybe i'm overexplaining here.. But i don't know, when i tried to change the middle i just felt it's proper in its place!