I Am Lost !

[mazHur]

I Am Lost!

by mazHur

Forgive me , Master,
for forgetting your teaching
and foolishly telling
a stranger
that i was broke;
since that moment
the stranger ,
who previously held me
in some esteem
doesn't see me now
with the same eyes,
same mind;
He who I called a stranger
until yesterday
deems me a stranger now,
and to me he appears
more stranger
than a stranger
I am lost!

thanks,,,,,I have changd that to 'mind';) :alien: :D . ( I avoided using 'love' as it sounds repugnant to my friend,BKJ !

[symphony]

i like the way it sounds. and the confusion rings out. nice work. :thumbs_up
(but i dont think u need the "same looks", once that u've said "same eyes")

[TheFifthElement]

Really enjoyed this poem mazHur, these lines in particular stood out:



doesn't see me now
with the same eyes,
same mind;


Loved the ending :thumbs_up

[symphony]

ah u changed the "same look"-bit. thanks :) .

[mazHur]

Well, you were right and I appreciated your point.thanks

and thank you, Fifth, for liking the stanza