Watercolours

[Isagel]

This is not a good brush
it leaves hair
on the paper
like traces
from a lover on the
white sheet
I wish there was
a lover
a reason for my hips
to go
sway, sway, sway
to that low sweet jazz.

Back, forth
the brush goes
my eyes like this blue
I could fill the paper
with it.
If anyone asks
I can say
it´s poetry.

I could write
my thoughts
with this brush in blue on blue
noone would
know
write
"love me"
and hang it on the wall
in a silver frame.

* I had an idea when I was painting that I should try and remember what I thought and use the traces of thoughts for a poem. So this is what came from that little experiment - when censored, cut, pasted and refined. Now I´m thinking about making more poems with different colour themes, and I´m curious to what you think about this first try.

[amuse]

i really like the first stanza. so melodious.

this:
"If anyone asks
I can say
it´s poetry."
is really funny. i like. :D

"write
my thoughts
with this brush in blue on blue"
is really provocative - like what exactly do you mean - it seems it could be taken a bunch of different ways, so my mind begins to whirr; i like this picture but wonder also...is it meant to be hidden. hmm. so interesting.

i like the color theme idea. :thumbs_up

[Isagel]

this:
"If anyone asks
I can say
it´s poetry."
is really funny. i like. :D


Glad you did. It was a kind of joke.




"write
my thoughts
with this brush in blue on blue"
is really provocative - like what exactly do you mean - it seems it could be taken a bunch of different ways, so my mind begins to whirr; i like this picture but wonder also...is it meant to be hidden. hmm. so interesting.


I don´t have any idea. In this poem I did not really mean for anything to mean something special- it was just thoughts rushing through my head, and I tried to write them down. I rember thinking that it would be possible to write down any kind of message, that I could put things there - in front of evryone and they would never know.

But Ilike to think that we think in symbols, that can be understood on different levels. Like when you write about picking up the sunshine in one of your new poems - it is both something that happend - a way of describing when you thought that patch of sun was a shoelace - but it could also be a symbol for a lot of things. I think we fall for certain kind of images because they touch something within. They can have meanings both known and unknown for us.

[Koa]

I love the first stanza too, especially

like traces
from a lover on the
white sheet
I wish there was
a lover
a reason for my hips
to go
sway, sway, sway

Sorry for being dumb, but why blue... with the brush? Is the hair meant to be blue? That's what I ended up thinking anyway...

[Isagel]

The poem is about me painting with blue colours, the brush is a paintbrush.
I´m sorry if that wasn´t clear. It must have seemed very strange.

[Koa]

Oh LOL a paintbrush!!!! I'm so dumb!!!
I was imagining hair on the paper cos it's a quite usual image as I tend to lose lots of hair...I have a big hair anyway so...
Will read the poem and get it right now :P

[amuse]

it was a patch of moonlight, i was a bit blind and clueless actually; i like what you mean about symbols...a lot. like how often they're there, whether subtle or overt, and how often do we recognize them...really nice style here, Isagel. :)

[verybaddmom]

i really like the same part that koa posted, i find it to be very sensual and keening. i like that...sort of angsty.
i feel so many things when i read this poem, and i like that too. i feel yearning, but soothed.
interesting. thank you isagel. well done

[Koa]

I really appreciate it more now that I got what it's about (me silly :blush:)
Really a very good one Isagel!!!