again..........

[ahsiam]

if i were a poem.........


if i were a poem..........
words'd strangle to be expressed
lines'd scare to take the lead
harmony'd flow like waves of shabby river.


i were a poem........
thoughts full of perennial dreams
vision full of rainbows
words full of vintage letters
and voice full of songs


i were a poem........
floating like clouds
dancing with the steps of rain
like a sunray on the streams.


i became a poem
when thoughts had a melancholy cry
and letters born by those drops of tear,
when memories had silent nights with a shut heart
and words had a pain of those memories,
when rhythm had a crimson mistake
and pages went red by those rhythms.


now i am a poem
a poem with drooping words
a poem with recluse rhythm
a poem of hidden pain, kept untouched

here i am, a poem of scattered words....
to be lost in old weary pages.


i dont know why did i dare to write a poem on this title(since i am a beginner) but nothing to do, i did.
and i did post this poem in '"if i were a poem......." please dont yell at me for posting it twice.:(

[ampoule]

I won't yell at you because I didn't see it before. I'm glad you posted it again. I actually liked the feel of hope to despair, to be lost in old weary pages and crimson mistakes and more. Your poem even makes me think of all the poems posted here. We post them all shiny and new. They may or may not get some comments and then they drift further and further away. It makes me want to occasionally click on an 'old weary page' from long ago and read the poems posted there.

[ahsiam]

thank you very much ampoule for not yelling at me:D and for taking your time to read this poem.its really awesome to feel that my poem made you think about the poems posted here in old weary pages.:)
and i am proud you liked my poem.:blush:
and again thanks for a wonderful comment.:)

[symphony]

No i dont want u to get lost in an old dreary page. I want u full of life. In here. In life.
:)

This is the best i've seen from u. Very well done.

[blazeofglory]

if i were a poem.........


if i were a poem..........
words'd strangle to be expressed
lines'd scare to take the lead
harmony'd flow like waves of shabby river.


i were a poem........
thoughts full of perennial dreams
vision full of rainbows
words full of vintage letters
and voice full of songs


i were a poem........
floating like clouds
dancing with the steps of rain
like a sunray on the streams.


i became a poem
when thoughts had a melancholy cry
and letters born by those drops of tear,
when memories had silent nights with a shut heart
and words had a pain of those memories,
when rhythm had a crimson mistake
and pages went red by those rhythms.


now i am a poem
a poem with drooping words
a poem with recluse rhythm
a poem of hidden pain, kept untouched

here i am, a poem of scattered words....
to be lost in old weary pages.


i dont know why did i dare to write a poem on this title(since i am a beginner) but nothing to do, i did.
and i did post this poem in '"if i were a poem......." please dont yell at me for posting it twice.:(

If you are a poet and a beginner in this line, you have indeed the knack of writing beautifully, and needless to say you are a gifted poet, for words cascade from you naturally and every word worded by is an impeccable piece, rare raindrops in the bosom of a desert.

Doubtless that you can write poems marvelously. You must be a man of resourcefulness. however to hone your style I suggest that you read Sufi poems. That is just my suggestions only, for Sufi poems are matchless in the body of world literature.

Have you read Khalil Gibran' s the Prophet ?

[dibyendra]

It's so nice poem from you ahsiam. I didn't notice this poem from you before and I'm happy that I didn't miss this time to read this good poem. I loved your feelings on this poem.

These lines are so beautiful ahsiam :


i were a poem........
floating like clouds
dancing with the steps of rain
like a sunray on the streams.

these lines too :


i became a poem
when thoughts had a melancholy cry
and letters born by those drops of tear,
when memories had silent nights with a shut heart
and words had a pain of those memories,
when rhythm had a crimson mistake
and pages went red by those rhythms.

and finally these lines :


here i am, a poem of scattered words....
to be lost in old weary pages.


The last finishing gives reader a different emotions like a movie concluding the story. Really liked the last stanza ! Keep on writing ahsiam.

[ahsiam]

If you are a poet and a beginner in this line, you have indeed the knack of writing beautifully, and needless to say you are a gifted poet, for words cascade from you naturally and every word worded by is an impeccable piece, rare raindrops in the bosom of a desert.

Doubtless that you can write poems marvelously. You must be a man of resourcefulness. however to hone your style I suggest that you read Sufi poems. That is just my suggestions only, for Sufi poems are matchless in the body of world literature.

Have you read Khalil Gibran' s the Prophet ?

thank you very much blaze.:D yes i am a beginner and this is my 5th poem.i didnt know that i have these wonderful things until you said it.:blush:
i cant tell you how much inspiration your words are for me! :)
i dont read sufi poems and i didnt read the prophet either.:( but i will, after my exam.
by the way i am not a man. i am a 16 year old college girl.;)
thank you again.:banana:

[ahsiam]

It's so nice poem from you ahsiam. I didn't notice this poem from you before and I'm happy that I didn't miss this time to read this good poem. I loved your feelings on this poem.

These lines are so beautiful ahsiam :


i were a poem........
floating like clouds
dancing with the steps of rain
like a sunray on the streams.

these lines too :


i became a poem
when thoughts had a melancholy cry
and letters born by those drops of tear,
when memories had silent nights with a shut heart
and words had a pain of those memories,
when rhythm had a crimson mistake
and pages went red by those rhythms.

and finally these lines :


here i am, a poem of scattered words....
to be lost in old weary pages.


The last finishing gives reader a different emotions like a movie concluding the story. Really liked the last stanza ! Keep on writing ahsiam.

thank you dibye for liking it.:) to tell you the truth i like your poems too.(i dont get the time to read it all, but the numbers i read, i like them. very much indeed:) ) .
its really nice that you liked my feelings.:D and i will keep on writing.

[ahsiam]

It's so nice poem from you ahsiam. I didn't notice this poem from you before and I'm happy that I didn't miss this time to read this good poem. I loved your feelings on this poem.

These lines are so beautiful ahsiam :


i were a poem........
floating like clouds
dancing with the steps of rain
like a sunray on the streams.

these lines too :


i became a poem
when thoughts had a melancholy cry
and letters born by those drops of tear,
when memories had silent nights with a shut heart
and words had a pain of those memories,
when rhythm had a crimson mistake
and pages went red by those rhythms.

and finally these lines :


here i am, a poem of scattered words....
to be lost in old weary pages.


The last finishing gives reader a different emotions like a movie concluding the story. Really liked the last stanza ! Keep on writing ahsiam.

thank you dibye for liking it.:) to tell you the truth i like your poems too.(i dont get the time to read it all, but the numbers i read, i like them. very much indeed:) ) .
its really nice that you liked my feelings.:D and i will keep on writing.

[ahsiam]

No i dont want u to get lost in an old dreary page. I want u full of life. In here. In life.
:)

This is the best i've seen from u. Very well done.

tui amar cool bud. tui mana korle to........
tui shalar amare inspiration dite dite akashe uthay disish.

[scarlet pain]

i would say my friend the first time you started writing you had no confidence,you said you are a disaster at this now look at you all shining and bright!:thumbs_up
sometimes you just have to wait for a break through;now you have it,i'm so glad!:)
keep it up chum!
(p.s. i find no criticism for this poem,its wonderfull,i just can say,like blazeofglory-you were born with it,it just had to come out!:) )

[ahsiam]

i would say my friend the first time you started writing you had no confidence,you said you are a disaster at this now look at you all shining and bright!:thumbs_up
sometimes you just have to wait for a break through;now you have it,i'm so glad!:)
keep it up chum!
(p.s. i find no criticism for this poem,its wonderfull,i just can say,like blazeofglory-you were born with it,it just had to come out!:) )

thank you scarlet.you always were my inspiration and always will be:) .