Standing On Soothing Shores

[Xillus_Xavier]

Standing On Soothing Shores

The rolling tide massages shore
And feet that seeks its soothing hands
My agony sweeps out to sea
Away, amidst receding sands

My hurt, these waves - they've met before
For years I've come to stand and cleanse
But though my woes flow from these toes
The wrinkled soles retain their sins

The salty breeze, it sings to me
A cheerful sun bequeaths relief
For death, divorce, all lifes' remorse
Have found a home within the reef.

And I shall stand and in waves today
As all my thoughts just fade away

[Virgil]

Nice Xillus. I like the soothing nature of this. The rhyme and rythm all assist in creating that feeling. I like especially the assonance (internal rhyme): woes/toes, divorce/remorce. And I liked the subtle alliteration of "s" throughout the poem: soothing, sands, soles, sins. The only thing I might criticize is personification of the pain: "My hurt, these waves - they've met before" - I don't usually care for stuff like that (it tends to seem corny) but I think perhaps it's not too bad in here since the whole point of the poem is how the ocean is soothing his pain away. I think your other good poetic effects minimize that defect. Nice poem.

[symphony]

I enjoyed reading it, Xavier. Sounds very soft and tender when read out loud.
:)
Wouldnt that be "seek" instead of "seeks" in that 2nd line, btw?