Playground in Iraq?

[aashishameya]

Full of brave children
Playground was;
Football, waiting for innocent touch
But it never happened
Silence and pain was in the air
Green grass put on bloody fabric
It was no more a play ground
A bomb (full of hatred) struck it.

[blp]

Good, but I don't think you need the last line do you? The green grass line does the job.

[ampoule]

Yes, good, but even if you leave the last two lines, I really don't think the '(full of hatred)' is needed. Perhaps let the reader decide what the bomb holds.

[symphony]

and even if u leave the "full of hatred" bit, i dont think the brackets add anything to it.

[aashishameya]

thank u very much for comments, it really make sense...i will try with changes

[Pensive]

I second symphony. You need not to write in the brackets (of hatred). Let the readers 'dig' the poem and interpret it in whatever the way they want.

[Mohammad Ahmad]

Full of brave children
Playground was;
Football, waiting for innocent touch
But it never happened
Silence and pain was in the air
Green grass put on bloody fabric
It was no more a play ground
A bomb (full of hatred) struck it.
God protect you as well as all Iraqis
Playground awfully previously was damaged but now it is well
Great deal of thanks for you to describe the circumstance

[NikolaiI]

I think it's perfect as is. Good job.

[Jerrybaldy]

I would guess you are struggling with English and as such it's a good job.