emblem of passion

[ahsiam]

come at dark depth
when water drops tune a lyre
and call it a rain.


come as my thoughts
when i think about you
and call it a dream.


come as my voice
when words make a harmony
and call it a song.


come as my sorrow
when a pearl arise from the sea
and call it a tear.


be my vision
when thousand colours dance together
and call it a rainbow.


be my shelter
when i live in you
and call it a home.


be with me
when i hide you behind everyone
and call it a shadow.


let your hand touch me
when moonlight touches the earth
and call it a heaven.


let your soul meet me
when true souls give birth to a story
and call it a history.


born as a sire of streams
and flow in my heart
then i will call it love.

[scarlet pain]

dear ahsiam loved your poem,it has got that magical touch which makes you very happy and light hearted.In the previous poems i found lil flaws but this one is near perfection.I know if you write more soon you'll mesmerize us all with your strong writings.Looking forward to those.................:)

[ahsiam]

thank you scarlet for inspiring me.:D

[CdnReader]

come at dark depth
when water drops tune a lyre
and call it a rain.

come as my thoughts
when i think about you
and call it a dream.

come as my voice
when words make a harmony
and call it a song.

come as my sorrow
when a pearl arise from the sea
and call it a tear.



I really like this, Ashiam, but I would have ended the poem right here. I loved the repetition of "come". It was dreamy and gentle and wonderful. When you suddenly changed the rhythm, switching to "be" then "let" and then "born", the transitions felt harsh to me. Perhaps there is more than one poem here? Or perhaps they need a clearer division to warn the reader that a change is coming? JMHO. :)

[symphony]

i like the freshness in this... i like the repeatation too..
and i like the way u improve a lot by each poem.

u go, girl! ;)

[blazeofglory]

come at dark depth
when water drops tune a lyre
and call it a rain.


come as my thoughts
when i think about you
and call it a dream.


come as my voice
when words make a harmony
and call it a song.


come as my sorrow
when a pearl arise from the sea
and call it a tear.


be my vision
when thousand colours dance together
and call it a rainbow.


be my shelter
when i live in you
and call it a home.


be with me
when i hide you behind everyone
and call it a shadow.


let your hand touch me
when moonlight touches the earth
and call it a heaven.


let your soul meet me
when true souls give birth to a story
and call it a history.


born as a sire of streams
and flow in my heart
then i will call it love.

This is really one of the few poems I have chosen to be my favorites. How you have so deeply and profoundly given interpretations vidications to everything. Indeed they are so beautifully worded, and so perfectly arranged.
You teemed your poem with very lively images and to be able to give such deep, yet so lucidly presented images is some job that is really tough. In fact I am an avid reader of poems and I read a variety of poems and this is really one of the beautifully presented poems I have ever read.

I am really moved beyond words, and I have collected it in my diary.

[gothic_goddess]

be with me
when i hide you behind everyone
and call it a shadow.


let your hand touch me
when moonlight touches the earth
and call it a heaven.


let your soul meet me
when true souls give birth to a story
and call it a history

wow, i love it ...take my breath away

[Xillus_Xavier]

Well written piece of work. It was a good read.

[ahsiam]

:D :D thank you everyone.:D thank you very very much.:D you people made my day.:D thank you again.:D
:D :D :D .
i am sorry .but its hard to stop grinning.:D :D :D :D

[ahsiam]

be with me
when i hide you behind everyone
and call it a shadow.


let your hand touch me
when moonlight touches the earth
and call it a heaven.


let your soul meet me
when true souls give birth to a story
and call it a history

wow, i love it ...take my breath away

gothic god , you dont know how much happy you made me, by this comment.

[ahsiam]

Well written piece of work. It was a good read.

thank you xavier. i am glad you liked it.:)

[ahsiam]

This is really one of the few poems I have chosen to be my favorites. How you have so deeply and profoundly given interpretations vidications to everything. Indeed they are so beautifully worded, and so perfectly arranged.
You teemed your poem with very lively images and to be able to give such deep, yet so lucidly presented images is some job that is really tough. In fact I am an avid reader of poems and I read a variety of poems and this is really one of the beautifully presented poems I have ever read.

I am really moved beyond words, and I have collected it in my diary.

thank you very much blaze. to tell you the truth, i have never been so much happy before. you have collected it in your diary? you really made me cry . again thanks.
by the way i dont know the meaning of vidication.:(

[ahsiam]

I really like this, Ashiam, but I would have ended the poem right here. I loved the repetition of "come". It was dreamy and gentle and wonderful. When you suddenly changed the rhythm, switching to "be" then "let" and then "born", the transitions felt harsh to me. Perhaps there is more than one poem here? Or perhaps they need a clearer division to warn the reader that a change is coming? JMHO. :)

no cdn there is only one poem here, i should have cared about the come ,let ,be and born. actually i expressed my feelings here so i didnt care about that. i should have, thank you for taking time to read it and comment.:)
i am sorry that i dont know the meaning of JMHO?:blush:

[ahsiam]

i like the freshness in this... i like the repeatation too..
and i like the way u improve a lot by each poem.

u go, girl! ;)

thank you symphony for inspiring me again.:D

[ahsiam]

i am sorry for so many posts.:(
but i am really very happy:D

[ampoule]

Beautiful ahsiam.


I believe JMHO stands for 'just my humble opinion'

[ahsiam]

Beautiful ahsiam.


I believe JMHO stands for 'just my humble opinion'

thank you ampoule for your precious comment.:)
and thank you for JMHO too :p

[River]

Wow. That was beautiful, and SO unique. Keep up the great work!

[ahsiam]

thank you river. i am really very much glad that you liked it.:)

[blazeofglory]

thank you very much blaze. to tell you the truth, i have never been so much happy before. you have collected it in your diary? you really made me cry . again thanks.
by the way i dont know the meaning of vidication.:(

actually i meant to write vindicating but mistakenly I wrote vidication

[ahsiam]

its ok, blaze. now i really know what you meant.:)