proof that i suck at poetry...

[gothic_goddess]

FALLING STAR

i cry as i hold onto your shirt
the memorys bring back the familuar hurt
its amazing how the smell of your couglone
makes me realize that im truely alone

will you ever be mine to hold? i wonder
will you ever be mine and mine alone? i ponder
its out of hand, howd it get this far
so much for trust, im your falling star

falling for you was suicide
i was in love, now i want to die
the temptation is deadly, for me and you
all i wanted was to hear you say i love you too...

[RPMI]

I really liked it, who said you 'sucked' at poetry? Good poem.

Don't you green font though, it's really hard to read. ;)

[gothic_goddess]

aww do you realy...i do...i mean..i just kinda suck...ya know i read some of the other poems on here and there amazing

[the silent x]

everyone criticizes there own writing, don't do so with yours. try not to compare it to others as well, it's very good, work on your spelling a bit though.

[gothic_goddess]

lol, yes, i was left out when god gave out the spelling technique...just something i never realy understood...:) its like my own language to spell everything wrong,..thanks

[symphony]

spellings can be corrected. and if not corrected, thay can be accepted. ;)
so u do NOT suck at poetry.