Earthy

[manny2]

i have never done a poem like this, comments would be nice so i can improve!

As the sun falls
The darkness comes,

As the darkness comes
The stars peer out,

As the stars peer out
The moon brightens,

When the moon goes down
The stars disappear,

When the stars disappear
The sun rises.

[blazeofglory]

i have never done a poem like this, comments would be nice so i can improve!

As the sun falls
The darkness comes,

As the darkness comes
The stars peer out,

As the stars peer out
The moon brightens,

When the moon goes down
The stars disappear,

When the stars disappear
The sun rises.

This is really a good poem, and this tells very great truths of life, something so simple, yet so complexly taken. Indeed this is so beautifully presented, a great truth in a poetic grandeur. You are indeed a rising sun.

This is how things go
Often high and often low

But life is indeed a flow
Sometimes speedy and sometimes slow

Morning has to lose to evening for a while
One has to cry to see again a smile
If the sun does not hide the beauty of the moon can not be seen
And if the winter does not come we can not see the spring,s sheen
Somewhere nature balances stating everything in order
birthing something together with something' s murder