Thinking

[Granny5]

Just a couple of thoughts
need work but what the hay
think I'll post them anyway.

Generations
Passed through time
From hand to hand
Womb to womb
Life to life
Stories of love
Disappointment
Redemption
Pain
Building on each


Stop Trying
Is this pain in my head
From tension or
From staring at this screen
Hours on end hoping
To connect with
Something in myself
Through others and
Their visions and words
Do I need to look deeper
Or not so deep, just speak
No thought no deliberate
Direction just wandering
To and fro from one thought
To another until something
Comes out that says
Something, anything
To me

[Lote-Tree]

Stop Trying
Is this pain in my head
From tension or
From staring at this screen
Hours on end hoping
To connect with
Something in myself
Through others and
Their visions and words
Do I need to look deeper
Or not so deep, just speak
No thought no deliberate
Direction just wandering
To an fro from one thought
To another until something
Comes out that says
Something, anything
To me

I liked this very much. "To connect with something in myself..." great line..:-) simple but very deep...that is the power of poetry...

[Granny5]

Thank you, Lote. I appreciate your comment.

[motherhubbard]

hoping
To connect with
Something in myself
Through others

I think we all do that. Great thought

[symphony]

Hey Gran :)

Besides the part of the second poem that Lote an Mom highlighted, I liked this bit from the first one too:

Stories of love
Disappointment
Redemption
Pain

[Poppy]

Very nice my dear. I lke them both of course. Keep reaching out kid. Some great thoughts.

[Granny5]

Thank you symphony and Poppy.

[ampoule]

Nice Granny. I especially like Stop Trying.....but don't! ;)

[Granny5]

Thanks amp. I'll keep on keeping on.

[dibyendra]

Very nice Granny ! I really liked the poem titled "Stop Trying". If you could work on the first one a little more making a good finishing, your both thoughts will come out shining like a diamond. :thumbs_up

[CdnReader]

I love Generations, Granny. What would you think about dropping the last two lines? :)

[PrinceMyshkin]

"Stop Trying" is surely the expression of something each of us here and elsewhere has felt, that urge to express ourselves which is more or less all that we want to say.

I wonder at times whether



Hey!
Hey, you!
Yes, you....

would pass for a poem.

[Granny5]

I love Generations, Granny. What would you think about dropping the last two lines? :)

Thanks everyone. I think they both need work. I sometimes post before I should. Cdn, I think Generations is better without the last two lines, too.
Any other suggestions will be appreciated. I'm here to learn and have pretty tough skin. Thanks again everyone.