Alone

[CdnReader]

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Alone

Within this confusion
I wonder why? how? when?
Where is the reality of this life
and where is the fantasy.....
and how do I tell them apart?

There are times that I wade through
a black river of discontent....
allowing misery to fill my footprints
with thick black mud.....
There are times that I think that
I have imagined
it all
and there is nowhere to go
that is real,
and no one here
that sees.

There are times that I allow my fingers
to trail.... lazy.... in the stream of my life....
exploring, examining, revisiting....
and always there is a sense of
desires unmet.

I have bravely faced my past,
my present, and my future....
yet what is it all worth?
...when I am still
......alone.

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[firefangled]

Cdn, the entire piece is exquisite, but I like these lines in particular.

Perhaps you could lose the ellipses in the last two lines and separate "alone" from the body by a line.



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There are times that I allow my fingers
to trail.... lazy.... in the stream of my life....
exploring, examining, revisiting....
and always there is a sense of
desires unmet.
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cdn/09oct07
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[blazeofglory]

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Alone

Within this confusion
I wonder why? how? when?
Where is the reality of this life
and where is the fantasy.....
and how do I tell them apart?

There are times that I wade through
a black river of discontent....
allowing misery to fill my footprints
with thick black mud.....
There are times that I think that
I have imagined
it all
and there is nowhere to go
that is real,
and no one here
that sees.

There are times that I allow my fingers
to trail.... lazy.... in the stream of my life....
exploring, examining, revisiting....
and always there is a sense of
desires unmet.

I have bravely faced my past,
my present, and my future....
yet what is it all worth?
...when I am still
......alone.

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cdn/09oct07
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In fact it is aloneness that we can brave every challenge facing us. In fact aloneness is better than loneliness. Loneliness is a kind of isolation, estrangement or disorientation whereas aloneness is something self initiation

[CdnReader]

Blaze: Thanks for your comments. Much appreciated.

Fire: Yes, I like your idea, and will make that change. There are different ways to get the right phrasing. :)

[Granny5]

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Alone

Within this confusion
I wonder why? how? when?
Where is the reality of this life
and where is the fantasy.....
and how do I tell them apart?

There are times that I wade through
a black river of discontent....
allowing misery to fill my footprints
with thick black mud.....
There are times that I think that
I have imagined
it all
and there is nowhere to go
that is real,
and no one here
that sees.

There are times that I allow my fingers
to trail.... lazy.... in the stream of my life....
exploring, examining, revisiting....
and always there is a sense of
desires unmet.

I have bravely faced my past,
my present, and my future....
yet what is it all worth?
...when I am still
......alone.

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cdn/09oct07
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My work week is over and now I get to find all the beautiful poems I've missed. Reading this one is like opening a present after waiting for Christmas!
It's lovely, Cdn. I can't wait to open all the other ones I've missed this week.

[CdnReader]

Thanks so much, Granny. Your comments always warm my heart. :)