The Prisoner

[Xillus_Xavier]

Ok this is not my usual type of poetry but I decided to give it a try.
I need some opinions on this type of writing without a rhyme scheme.

The Prisoner

I am trying so hard
to escape. The image
of you is my warden,
my guards, my cell and these
cold bars that imprison my heart.

Sentenced for life, I will
do my time alone in pain,
amidst the darkness of
an unfathomable future without you.

The enforcer of this emotional
confinement are the Polaroids of my mind;
the haunting thought of your smile.
I shall never escape.

[blazeofglory]

Ok this is not my usual type of poetry but I decided to give it a try.
I need some opinions on this type of writing without a rhyme scheme.

The Prisoner

I am trying so hard to escape you.
Your image is my warden, my guards,
my cell, and these cold bars
that imprison my heart.

Sentenced for life,
I will do my time alone in pain,
amidst the darkness of an
unfathomable future without you.

All that I have left are these
Polaroids of the mind,
and the haunting thought of your smile.
I shall never escape.

Poems are free expressions indeed and they do not need rhymes and the rest of technicalities indeed. All that it asks of is spontaneous expression, effortlessly indeed and that is what makes a good poem or else poems are junks of words, and indeed it must be expressive of something layered within us deep down.

Your poem meets that criterion to a certain extent, if not to the whole extent. In your poem there is a commingling of two states. One you are happy with your love for they are your guards and at the same time the same guards are imprisoning you indeed.

Overall I like the poem

[ampoule]

I like it. Just not sure about the word Polaroids but I get the idea.

[dibyendra]

I like poetry mostly without rhyme. When you rhyme a poem, they sounds good but the main thing is about expression and they get lost when you try to stuff words to rhyme. But it doesn't mean that you shouldn't rhyme, rhyming is always good to listen and to express poetically as well. I liked your effort Xillus :thumbs_up !

[TheFifthElement]

Ok this is not my usual type of poetry but I decided to give it a try.
I need some opinions on this type of writing without a rhyme scheme.

The Prisoner

I am trying so hard to escape you.
Your image is my warden, my guards,
my cell, and these cold bars
that imprison my heart.

Sentenced for life,
I will do my time alone in pain,
amidst the darkness of an
unfathomable future without you.

All that I have left are these
Polaroids of the mind,
and the haunting thought of your smile.
I shall never escape.

I liked this Xillus - I tend to prefer non-rhyming poetry and you've achieved this very successfully. I enjoyed the first stanza in particular.

[Xillus_Xavier]

Thanks for the kind comments everyone.
I've made some changes to the poem and hope they improve the quality

[Xcape]

I like it