amusedfall
10-04-2007, 07:15 PM
Hello I am new to this forum and just wanted feedback on a poem I wrote. Thank you.
RUSH
ENCAPSULATED EMOTIONS
PAIN IN MY INSIDES BARE SEARING SCARS
THREAD BY THREAD THE WALLS GROW
BOTTLED RAGE REPLACING MY STRENGTH
MY SOUL DECAYS IN COBWEB DREAMS
UNTIL THAT DAY, THE DAY IT RUSHES
THE NEED TO CLEANSE THE UNWANTED
WINDS BLOW, WATER OVERFLOWS
EMOTION CRAWLS THROUGH THE DARK ENERGY BINDING MY SPIRIT
CRACKS IN MY AURA LETTING IN THE LIGHT
SO WARM AND SO BRIGHT
THE RUSHING BREEZE PASSES OVER ME,
ITS CLARITY AWAKENS MY LOST HOPE
THE INTENSITY OF MY MEMORIES EASE ALONG WITH MY TRIALS
IN THIS MOMENT I SUCCUMB TO DREAM TO BE FREE,
OF THE REALITY I KNOW WILL RETURN
AS DOES THE PULSE OF LIFE AFTER THE STORM
TO LET MY PAST END AND DECIDE TO BREATHE
I STEP BACK INTO MY CHOICE OF WALKING THROUGH THIS ORDEAL
TO KEEP THE RUSH AND RELEASE THE PAIN
THE SOFT AND SWEET PLACE IS NOW TO GAIN.
RUSH
ENCAPSULATED EMOTIONS
PAIN IN MY INSIDES BARE SEARING SCARS
THREAD BY THREAD THE WALLS GROW
BOTTLED RAGE REPLACING MY STRENGTH
MY SOUL DECAYS IN COBWEB DREAMS
UNTIL THAT DAY, THE DAY IT RUSHES
THE NEED TO CLEANSE THE UNWANTED
WINDS BLOW, WATER OVERFLOWS
EMOTION CRAWLS THROUGH THE DARK ENERGY BINDING MY SPIRIT
CRACKS IN MY AURA LETTING IN THE LIGHT
SO WARM AND SO BRIGHT
THE RUSHING BREEZE PASSES OVER ME,
ITS CLARITY AWAKENS MY LOST HOPE
THE INTENSITY OF MY MEMORIES EASE ALONG WITH MY TRIALS
IN THIS MOMENT I SUCCUMB TO DREAM TO BE FREE,
OF THE REALITY I KNOW WILL RETURN
AS DOES THE PULSE OF LIFE AFTER THE STORM
TO LET MY PAST END AND DECIDE TO BREATHE
I STEP BACK INTO MY CHOICE OF WALKING THROUGH THIS ORDEAL
TO KEEP THE RUSH AND RELEASE THE PAIN
THE SOFT AND SWEET PLACE IS NOW TO GAIN.