Loser

[Libra Swords]

I feel lost and have no energy,
I feel lazy and have no integrity,
I find that having no life and
having no reason, is the place
of this season,

For times look uncertain,
and hope is failing,
I wish I could find some peace,
with success as my guide,
and some money to buy a cause,

For life is leaving and I am just
drifting, far away into space,
Praying for some strength at the
right time and place.

I will become successful someday,
I'll take a chance, for being a loser
has no way and has no time to play.

[Libra Swords]

Has anyone read this poem?
Please read and reply.

[xby]

Sorry, I cannot understand it well. Does it tell the ambiguity of your sense toward life?

[verybaddmom]

i really like this line:

"and some money to buy a cause"

i find that both cynical and insightful, if that is possible.

[Koa]

why do i feel it's too optimistic again, even if i do understand the feeling very well?

[emily655321]

"I will become successful someday,
I'll take a chance..."

Because of that. ;) Maybe too optimistic for the two of us to relate to, but she's clearly a very optimistic person.

Jasmine -- I really like the structure of this one. It flows beautifully, and there's a lot of strength in the lines.

[Koa]

No em, it's not that... it is clearly optimistic but it's not that, even the rest... :eek: hey, what about some blood, death, hopelessness, floods of tears and suicidal thoughts? :D:D:D:D:D: (kidding of course :D)

[Libra Swords]

Hey......optimistic is just who I am, but more so a big believer in wisdom
and truth! I am a very spiritual person, and anyone who tries to take that
away from me, will not have very long to live! (Wisdom and truth are my
freedoms)

[emily655321]

There's definitely nothing wrong with optimism.

[Koa]

I used to be all optimism till I was 13... now I can't believe it :eek:

[emily655321]

Same here. I was an unbearably perky child.

[amuse]

I am a very spiritual person, and anyone who tries to take that
away from me, will not have very long to live!
eh :confused:

[verybaddmom]

i second your "eh :confused:", As.
seems like an inherent contradiction, no?