cosmic dancing

[CdnReader]

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cosmic dancing

skimming through the galaxy
touching lightbeams
glinting off comets
in a great cosmic dance

the stars wink at each other
(and we do too)
as we whiz by
in a motionless frenzy

a shimmering trail is left
swirls and twirls, spins and eddies
intersections, fusions, separations
invisibly marking our passage

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[PrinceMyshkin]

A poem that feels as if it were breathed out rather than concocted! Thanks.

[TheFifthElement]

Interesting poem Cdn, I particularly liked this bit :


a shimmering trail is left
swirls and twirls, spins and eddies
intersections, fusions, separations
invisibly marking our passage

I loved 'the stars wink at each other (and we do too)', which creates a lovely warm and very human moment in the otherwise cosmic theme.

I wasn't too sure about 'motionless frenzy', as the whole poem is in motion, the concept of 'motionless', particularly following 'wizz by' doesn't really seem to fit here. Then perhaps I'm being too literal, as is often the case!

[Amfortas]

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cosmic dancing

skimming through the galaxy
touching lightbeams
glinting off comets
in a great cosmic dance

the stars wink at each other
(and we do too)
as we whiz by
in a motionless frenzy

a shimmering trail is left
swirls and twirls, spins and eddies
intersections, fusions, separations
invisibly marking our passage

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cdn/30may06
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And we , we are but stuff of comets tails

thank you.

[CdnReader]

Thanks, PM and Amfortas.

Fifth, about the "motionless frenzy" .... I had two ideas about that phrase. First, how things at a cosmic distance look as though they're utterly stopped in space despite the movement. And secondly, that the "we" referred to have come to a momentary stop to make that connection and then fly off again. Perhaps it didn't translate as well as I'd hoped. ;)

[TheFifthElement]

Thanks, PM and Amfortas.

Fifth, about the "motionless frenzy" .... I had two ideas about that phrase. First, how things at a cosmic distance look as though they're utterly stopped in space despite the movement. And secondly, that the "we" referred to have come to a momentary stop to make that connection and then fly off again. Perhaps it didn't translate as well as I'd hoped. ;)


Thanks for this Cdn, I've read it again bearing in mind the context you mentioned and it makes perfect sense. I was definitely having a 'too literal' moment ;)