fate

[CdnReader]

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fate

there is little i fear
on this earth or beyond
it is truth that i seek
and i am honour bound

i yearn to reach higher
than ever before
i stand in the fire
i will shrink no more

gritting my teeth
against forces that fight
rising up from beneath
clothed dark as the night

my sword is no virgin
you can be assured
it has seen the anger within
and i shall endure

will you stand by me
and howl at this fate?
your strength and my steel
the future lies in wait

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[ampoule]

Ooo fate, naughty naughty fate. I like what you have said and how you've said it. That 'my sword is no virgin' was striking to me.
I love the idea of standing with someone and howling at fate! Ahhhoooooooooo....grrrr.

[Lote-Tree]

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my sword is no virgin


I love this expression.

Liked the poem overall :-)

[Pensive]

I love this expression.

Liked the poem overall :-)

It's one of those few places where I second you, Lote. :p

[PrinceMyshkin]

Somehow the fact that it rhymes - or that the rhymes are so blatant - takes away from the conviction you want this to convey.

[CdnReader]

Thanks, everyone. I appreciate your comments. :)