Trapped

[Sorcha]

The darkness chokes me
Its claws sinking in,
Quenching the flickering flame within
Hope a distant fantasy
Fading away
Into oblivion.
I stand alone, forsaken.

Lost
In a maze of anguish, lies and despair
Truth’s pure, searing beacon of light
Tarnished.
Tainted.
Gone.
Something flickers
At the edges of reality
Desperate to be seen
A memory
Of something beyond impenetrable darkness
But its feeble grip is
Torn away by insinuating tendrils of shadow

Madness closes in,
Enveloping me
In its insatiable embrace
Its gaping maw a trap
That pulls me down ever deeper
Into the whirlpool of insanity
Until life has fled
Leaving me
An empty vessel
Twisted and broken
My soul withered and deformed,
Locked within
A cage of its own making
The key to freedom forever gone
From its desperate, searching grasp

[Sorcha]

Would anyone like to comment on my poem?

[evulik]

I like it... I felt not that long ago like this :
"Hope a distant fantasy
Fading away
Into oblivion.
I stand alone, forsaken."
just I did not find the right words for its expression. and now I feel more like
"...Locked within
A cage of its own making
The key to freedom forever gone"

the picture of yours express the feeling of this poem. It is striking how much loneliness is spreading from your words and on the same time I feel the power. do not know the right words in english - the power of understanding the situation, the power of something very individual, something you probably understand better than I... but I like it.. :thumbs_up

[Miranda]

I think this is great poem Sancho. I like the way it conveys the 'locked in' feeling and of hope being in the distance..but then disapearing altogether. There have been some pretty miserable poems on this forum lately, but I don't think this is miserable, even though it expresses sadness and hopelessness. Somehow it creates a feeling of empathy and I think this is what Eviluk was trying to say. Perhaps it's because at some time we all feel this way..or know we can feel this way and it touches a chord deep inside. I like it's imagery and thinkthe poem is skillfully written.

[amuse]

Sorcha wrote this poem.

[Miranda]

Sorry Sorcha for attributing your poem to someone else.

[Sorcha]

That's okay. I make mistakes like that all the time :lol: Thanks for the compliment to my poem... :)