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[CdnReader]

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hidden in the forest
i lie, drowning, in the
fertile embrace of the trees,
the colours of my heartache
refracted through a winter's sunset
as a kaleidoscope
...changing...
...spinning...

i fold my sorrows, quietly, into a spider's web
bright hues lost amongst the opalescent strands
pulling tight the silk-gleaming threads, as light as morning


...clinging...

then

...released...


drifting away
as a leaf on the wind


. . . . .


safe now, i
wrap your love around me
and sleep



cdn/19sep07

[Granny5]

Your work is so beautiful. Everytime I read something you've written, I wish I could write like you. I really love this one.

[Mesalithasamut]

I've been reading many of your poems lately, and they make me feel warm, comfortable and happy. I like your endings very much as well.

[CdnReader]

Thanks very much, Granny and Mesalithasamut. I'm not certain that I'm happy with the spacing, but I'm glad you like it. :)

[Granny5]

Cdn, it reads beautifully with the spacing as is. I think you should publish your work. It's some of the best on LitNet, IMHO.

[SleepyWitch]

wow, Cdn I love it!
my fave lines
i fold my sorrows, quietly, into a spider's web
bright hues lost amongst the opalescent strands
and the ending of course.
i think this is the first poem by you i've read.. will look out for the others

[CdnReader]

It'll have to be a short contract, Granny. When classes start up in a couple weeks, poetry will quickly become a distant memory. :lol:

Thank you, SleepyWitch. You are very kind. :)

[Granny5]

You and motherhubbard need to concentrate on what's important........writing poems so I can be entertained!!

[CdnReader]

:lol: :lol: :lol:

I shall take that into consideration, Granny. ;)

[Granny5]

Thank you. It's not all about me, but it should be.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Loved the delicate touch throughout this (but quibbled a bit at "opalescent" because it seemed too fancy for the the more everyday language elsewhere).

[barbara0207]

Loved the delicate touch throughout this (but quibbled a bit at "opalescent" because it seemed too fancy for the the more everyday language elsewhere).

Delicate touch - yes, that's what I loved, too.
But I do not quite agree about the word 'opalescent'. I could actually see an opal, shimmering softly in different colours, depending on the angle from which you look at it. So I thought the word illustrates the meaning very well. And then there are words like 'refracted' and 'kaleidoscope', which are perhaps not that common.

But then, I'm not a native speaker, of course.

[alyplz]

It looks like I'm not the only one who loves your poems! You are really good! I love this one :D thanks for sharing :D

[dibyendra]

Perfect poem cdn ! I loved the beautiful imagination of yours in this poem.

The following 2 paragraphs are really grooving.




hidden in the forest
i lie, drowning, in the
fertile embrace of the trees,
the colours of my heartache
refracted through a winter's sunset
as a kaleidoscope
...changing...
...spinning...

i fold my sorrows, quietly, into a spider's web
bright hues lost amongst the opalescent strands
pulling tight the silk-gleaming threads, as light as morning

Keep up your great work cdn ! :thumbs_up You are really a great poet.

Dibyendra

[CdnReader]

Many thanks, Barbara, Alyplz, and Dibyendra. I'm glad you enjoyed this one. :)