Walking On Clouds

[Libra Swords]

I feel free
and want to dance,
I feel the air sway
and see the sunset
at a glance,

Below I see the trees
sway, the birds fly
and smile as I wave good bye,

Clouds are like a soft
feathery like pillow tickeling
my feet, as I dance upon
this wonderful thrill,
I shrill and awake finding
myself on a hill.

Is that what it feels to be
walking on clouds? If it be,
then let me walk upon those
clouds with grace and glee.

[Avalive]

nice......

[evulik]

hey are you in love? ;) wonderful... I so envy you (in a good sense), such a wonderful creation would never come up from my head ...

[Libra Swords]

Why thank you! I guess I have some talent! ;)

Do you think I could really write poems and become successful??

[Avalive]

Everybody (over 50% means everybody for me. In other words, if more than half of the population can do and achieve a thing, then it definitely means nothing difficult. Believe or not. That's the only way I judge if a thing is tough or it is actually easy) --- Everybody( 50% +)can write poems. Most of them are good ones. So what's the big deal about being successful on this. Take a look around. Tons of poems out there. These are just quite good but similar,tho. If everybody deserves to be crowned, then why should we give a D-A-M-N about the crown? Most of writing we do are Just vent of some ego feelings,little stars in our own universe. These ones would never really become real great literature. But, they are sincere, they can be a part of us and our thoughs. But when you talk about getting successful on just couples of ordinary poems that really depressed the others. Don't be too serious about how people feel about ur poem or if they boo or cheer. Successeful or not. Cuz nothing is a big deal. Those ones who want the claps the most,usually the ones who can never be a thing. I'd hope I could invent a never-broken bulb than writing a poem. I don't mean poem is nothing. I enjoy reading or writting them sometimes. It's a good art form. Just ....


Well,Let me wrap this up and all end up with one single word

WHATEVER


pS: I really didn't mean to be rude. I left there right after I potsed da reply, I don't know if the person replied or not. I didn't mean to hurt anybody's feeling. I just can't stand a thing like that. I'd say sorry,but I won't change my attitude.

[Avalive]

Sorry if i said anything offend you. I never mean to. Just I tried to be honest to my feelings.

I was not like--->:rage:
I was just --->:confused: & :rolleyes:

nevermind

[evulik]

I suppose you can try it. no matter what is in the two post above me. not everybody writes poems. well I do, I will copy one from home and view it here for you, so that you see that your poems are about something and there is meaning in them, while my poems are more about my feelings... nothing deep :D so my opinion, you write better poems than those 50% + mentioned above... so go ahead.. once you publish them I will be like :banana: :banana: I met her in the forum ;)

[Koa]

I think the point of sharing poetry is to let others relate to it. Not everybody can express their feeling in that way, and poets give them the words. Personally I'd hate to have my stuff published at the moment, but I'd love to be a great one in the Olympus one day ;), when maybe someone will read my things and feel still sympathy, as I do when I read something I like.

I have been considering for days whether to comment on Libra Swords poetry or not... Because honestly, I don't like it. Technically, I think it's good poetry, good imagery, well balanced, and stuff...It is poetry, definitely. But there's something that really doesn't make me appreciate it, I still haven't figured out precisely what it is. Well in this particular poem it's probably the sense of happiness (ok I'm a fan of dark poetry, but it's not that I've never written anything slightly happy... uhm...). But even in other stuff I've read, even if I could appreciate the idea and something of the form, I didn't manage to think 'I like it'. Maybe it's the light-hearted, positive feeling I find after all, maybe it's because the style flows lightly, not 'rushly'...(which in a normal person's mind should be a positive thing...)...Maybe it feels so 'classic'...I don't know...
I'm sorry to say that, I hope you, Libra Swords, are not offended because this is only my very personal feeling and I didn't manage to shut up about it (abuse of sincerity is a problem I'm facing lately :eek:). I'd like to have the exact perception of why I don't like, so that it could be at least constructive criticism... Anyway keep writing, for the enjoyment of those who like your style :)