Proof that Bakiryu is not a poet.

[Bakiryu]

I've no muse, it's true.....I'd better stick to reading instead. Comment if you please.



Don't stare at me
Your eyes burn
they make me weak

to try and speak in analytical metaphors
Instead of writing a simple poem
That gladdens the heart
And saddens the soul

don't judge me at a glance
Don't love me at a word

You can't understand me
When I'm an easy riddle
You can and cannot love
When I'm guarded and giving

Don't stare....
Don't stare at me
Your eyes burn and I want to hide

I hate you
I love you
both

The pain is too much
Happiness and glad

Joy through my veins
Anger in my soul

Don't judge me'
Don't touch me
Don't........

I'm afraid
of the world

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My muse died
And i cried
Lines of blue poetry
Random gypsy lines

As mendicants begging for alms
The words turned inhuman
My muse today died

She was horrid
She was beautiful
All itchyweed and branblevine

She was dark
Sepia tinted
All marigolds and brandywine

My muse died
And I cried
She tore my heart
Without goodbyes

My eyes beat
No more sleep
My muse today left

The world kept on turning
Only i cared

*************************

Only you and I are here
In a world no one can hear
How do we know we're real
If we feel things no one can feel?

I see you in my mind
So far away
Our hands touch across the emptiness
Fingers
meet

Stretching through time
The future burns
Only you and I are real
In a world were no one else can feel.

********************************************

She was all words and lyrics and poetry
Old books forever turning mad
She was all mirrors and lines
Stanzas

She drove me sane,
she drove me mad

She was today
Yesterday
The future
The words no one could ever tell

I saw her only once
Far away
Reflected on a window

And that day
I fell in love with myself.



I want to hold you tight
Like a lie that will last forever
As soon as we close your eyes
Bonds that no one can sever

I want to dream you mad
Whisper your voice on my ears
I want to bring you to life
I want to see you again
Words we can never trust
Writers are insane

[Lote-Tree]

I like them :D Especially "you and I are here..."

[TheFifthElement]

Baki, you are a poet, don't be so apologetic about it!

I loved these two in particular :


Don't stare at me
Your eyes burn
they make me weak

to try and speak in analytical metaphors
Instead of writing a simple poem
That gladdens the heart
And saddens the soul

don't judge me at a glance
Don't love me at a word

You can't understand me
When I'm an easy riddle
You can and cannot love
When I'm guarded and giving

Don't stare....
Don't stare at me
Your eyes burn and I want to hide

I hate you
I love you
both

The pain is too much
Happiness and glad

Joy through my veins
Anger in my soul

Don't judge me'
Don't touch me
Don't........

I'm afraid
of the world



She was all words and lyrics and poetry
Old books forever turning mad
She was all mirrors and lines
Stanzas

She drove me sane,
she drove me mad

She was today
Yesterday
The future
The words no one could ever tell

I saw her only once
Far away
Reflected on a window

And that day
I fell in love with myself.



Powerful and painful, beautiful and dark - like all the best things in life. There's some sage advice in the second one
I fell in love with myself you should follow it.

[Bakiryu]

Thanks to both of you! :) How come everybody is awake so early?

[Pendragon]

Ryu, if you are no poet, then the Sun comes up in the North, not the East! Your poems are born of emotion and humanity, the best stuff to put into poetry. (I do think you meant BRAMBLE VINE :lol: ) The worst thing a poet can do is believe that their writing is worthless. It isn't. You wrote it and it means you.

Pen

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[Poppy]

Wonderful stuff....and you know I feel the same way. I am reluctant to post mine sometimes, and then I realize I have to only please myself right?

[Bakiryu]

You do have a point Poppy! I would probably discuss it but alas, I must leave and go to sleep. Bye-bye!

[farnoosh]

well,i think they are brilliant !!!keep up the good work,baki!

[NikolaiI]

These are so wonerful, Baki, every one of them. It's free to dream...anyway, these are beautiful and deep. I love your style, and I think you could become a great poet as well as writer. I can't wait to read more. These poems are special because I can scroll the screen over them and read them, so quickly, because they fit together perfectly. I love your word choice and every line seems mostly essential and takes the poem on a line further. References to writing, poetry, feeling, the fear in the first one, and...it's just really wonderful. Like it's a poem that sounds dangerous.

Edit: I agree with farnoosh.

[Bakiryu]

:blush: Thank you! Has anyone ever told you that you are a very complimentary person Nikolai?

(BTW: I got the word mendicant from your profile :D and just ran it through the dictionary)

[NikolaiI]

:blush: Thank you! Has anyone ever told you that you are a very complimentary person Nikolai?

(BTW: I got the word mendicant from your profile :D and just ran it through the dictionary)

I thought you might have, and you're welcome, I don't think they have.

I love this part most of all



Only you and I are here
In a world no one can hear
How do we know we're real
If we feel things no one can feel?

I see you in my mind
So far away
Our hands touch across the emptiness
Fingers
meet

Stretching through time
The future burns
Only you and I are real
In a world were no one else can feel.

[AuntShecky]

The only "proof" here is that Bakiryu has the courage to put her work down for others to see and comment upon.
I disagree with those who say that one is not a writer unless he or she is published. I say a writer is a person who writes. Same with poetry. Please tell me that I am right, Bakiryu!

[stephofthenight]

BAD BAKI, you must work on the image that you see, because you are a poet, you put the way you feel into words...that for poems...meaning you arre a poet... and a pretty good one at that :thumbs_up:

[SleepyWitch]

i like them Baki!
especially these lines

I saw her only once
Far away
Reflected on a window

And that day
I fell in love with myself.
all of them are good