PDA

View Full Version : Relationship



dibyendra
09-13-2007, 03:48 AM
This poem expresses some experiences of my life and some parts are just fictious. Although I have tried to show possibilities that may happen which is not always true :) . Any suggestions and comments are welcome. Your comments will be highly appreciated. Thank you !




Relationship relies on trust, not on promises.
Promises may be the cage made of glass.
They can get shattered anytime into fragments.
That relation cannot move any further by gluing together...

Relationship is impressed on commitment, not in moments of togetherness.
Moments of togetherness may become sparks raised from doubts.
They may turn into blaze anytime
which always cannot be extinguished...

Relationship flourishes in patience, not in haste.
Haste may become a blow of the storm.
It calms down only after a severe destruction
which cannot be undone again...

Relationship is written in blood, not in the form of words.
Written words may just remain bounded only to the words.
They may easily get faded
which when written cannot build a relation again...

Relationship lives in transparency of feelings, not in pretense.
Pretense shows different face covering the reflections of real feelings.
It comes to end anytime showing it's real face.
That relation always cannot be started again after the end.

Relationship is the union of souls, not of bodies.
Union of bodies may just be an illusion.
Any force may compel helplessly to kneel
which cannot be thought that wailing will unify the relation again...

ampoule
09-13-2007, 06:11 AM
This poem expresses some experiences of my life and some parts are just fictious. Although I have tried to show possibilities that may happen which is not always true :) . Any suggestions and comments are welcome. Your comments will be highly appreciated. Thank you !

Relationship relies on trust, not on promises.
Promises may be the cage made up of glass.
They can get shattered anytime into fragments
which cannot move any further by gluing together...

Relationship is impressed on commitment, not in moments of togetherness.
Moments of togetherness may become sparks raised from doubts.
They may turn into blaze anytime
which always cannot be extinguished...

Relationship flourishes in patience, not in haste.
Haste may become a blow of the storm.
It calms down only after a severe destruction
which cannot be undone again...

Relationship is written in blood, not in the form of words.
written in words may just remain bounded to the words.
They may easily get faded
which when written cannot build a relation again...

Relationship is the union of souls, not of bodies.
Union of bodies may just be an illusion.
Any force may compel helplessly to kneel
which cannot be thought that wailing will unify again...

I like many of the thoughts you have here but especially the first verse.
I'm not sure I understand verse four but that doesn't mean change it, I just need to think about it more. And five.....very very interesting.

stephofthenight
09-13-2007, 11:50 AM
Relationship is written in blood, not in the form of words.
written in words may just remain bounded to the words.
They may easily get faded
which when written cannot build a relation again...


i love this one. i like the poem but theses lines just melt together perfectly in a very thoughtfully deep way.

dibyendra
09-14-2007, 01:43 PM
I like many of the thoughts you have here but especially the first verse.
I'm not sure I understand verse four but that doesn't mean change it, I just need to think about it more. And five.....very very interesting.

Thank you so much Amp for appreciating my thoughts and for your valuable comment ! Yes, fourth paragraph in the previous poem was confusing in which I actually tried to express is that relationship is a bond which is transferred through the form of blood.


Relationship is written in blood, not in the form of words.
written in words may just remain bounded to the words.
They may easily get faded
which when written cannot build a relation again...


i love this one. i like the poem but theses lines just melt together perfectly in a very thoughtfully deep way.

Thank you so much Steph for appreciating my poem and for your kind words !

I've updated the poem adding yet another paragraph which I though is essential to show the true picture of "relationship".