like you

[CdnReader]

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like you
i stretched my arms
across an ocean

our hands touched
we picked up love
we allowed it to fill our minds
watched it filter between our fingers
spilling off the page
in a torrent of perfection

like you
i sunk too deep
i became entangled in a jungle
that I never wanted to leave
i tried to find ways
to keep the world out
i pretended that nothing could change
but our need for freedom
was bigger than the jungle
or the ocean

like you
i walked out alone

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[Sweets America]

Oh, this is quite sad...:(
A wonderful love, and then, loneliness.
You talk about freedom... Well, I think that true loves are the ones when you feel that you give yourself to the other, but that in the meantime, the other always makes you feel free? To me, love is about nourishing oneself through the other, and each individual adds things to him/herself, which nourishes the relationhip in return.
What do you mean by 'I tried to find ways to keep the world out'?

[ampoule]

Lots of images and thoughts in this poem. I like it.

[Pendragon]

CDN what can I say? You keep tossing out one well-written, well-balanced poem after another! Wow! You could title your poem book, "D Shaped Poems In Perfect Pitch".

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Pen

[ampoule]

Wow! You could title your poem book, "D Shaped Poems In Perfect Pitch".
Pen

Wow, I like that! :)

[firefangled]

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like you
i stretched my arms
across an ocean

our hands touched
we picked up love
we allowed it to fill our minds
watched it filter between our fingers
spilling off the page
in a torrent of perfection

like you
i sunk too deep
i became entangled in a jungle
that I never wanted to leave
i tried to find ways
to keep the world out
i pretended that nothing could change
but our need for freedom
was bigger than the jungle
or the ocean

like you
i walked out alone

.
cdn/22jan07
.

The end hit me like a tsunami. Your poems are stunning in their reality. Wonderful!

[CdnReader]

Oh, this is quite sad...:(
A wonderful love, and then, loneliness.
You talk about freedom... Well, I think that true loves are the ones when you feel that you give yourself to the other, but that in the meantime, the other always makes you feel free? To me, love is about nourishing oneself through the other, and each individual adds things to him/herself, which nourishes the relationhip in return.
What do you mean by 'I tried to find ways to keep the world out'?

Thank you very much, Sweets. Relationships are SO complicated, and every single one seems to impact in a different way, with different needs, and different outcomes. It's like raising children. You can go in using the exact same skills that worked last time, yet find out that things work out entirely differently. "I tried to find ways to keep the world out" refers to an attempt to block out reality.


Lots of images and thoughts in this poem. I like it.

Thank you, Amp. This one seemed to take a lot of reworking. I'm not sure yet that I'm entirely happy with it. ;)


CDN what can I say? You keep tossing out one well-written, well-balanced poem after another! Wow! You could title your poem book, "D Shaped Poems In Perfect Pitch".


Oh, Pen, you are so sweet. THANK YOU!! I wasn't entirely sure what you meant, so I had to go back and have a look. You're right! I do tend to write in "D Shapes", don't I?? :lol: I wonder why??? :)


The end hit me like a tsunami. Your poems are stunning in their reality. Wonderful!

Thanks, Fire. This is a very personal piece....written from a place deep inside that speaks of truth and pain. Poetry seems to be the only way for me to reach those feelings and deal with them. Thanks again for your kind words.