Just a Question

[dyingflame]

What do you think/understand, about the following poem?


Mirrors

Held solid and aloft

only by the wind slapping my face

I tremble

and the retreat rings out in the hollows

of caves in foreign mountains.



I understood while I slipped the stairs

that this was the battle that we have always lived;

the one fought out under the rain with blunt swords

and a few feet away from discarded glass.



I have hundreds of photos.

All of them do not show the exact scene

we had aimed at. For even when our backs were turned

the mind was set

behind the reflected glass;

we sat

apart.



My eyes began to itch but I ignored them,

until the pain spread into the tips of my body,

reflected in knives, in plates, in those fateful two words,

and the imaginary cars and flowers withered

as the sprinklers threw lifeless water on top of us.



The humanity urged us to sleep,

to sew our mouths shut and shout in silence

in our reflections, the reality

in our reflexive actions, our struggle.

[Pendragon]

I am not good at analyizing poetry. I know what I like and dislike. To me though, it could be a couple's strugle with life, trying to remain together through all the things that tear relationships apart. The mirrors show age, we lose our youth and have crisis and stress. The sword battles in the rain, tearful arguments. Pictures taken without aiming, conceptions couples are apt to get of each other without fact to back it up, we KNOW it. But we don't. Getting down to the point where we get on each other's nerves so badly we want nothing of ours to touch theirs, not even a reflection. And then when it strikes us what fools we are acting, or when we go too far, images of sewing our mouths shut hit us, "I shouldn't have said that." you know. Anyway, my two cents,

Pen

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[dyingflame]

Thanks pendragon, I really mean it. I found it really difficult to post this poem as it is really personal, but I needed to understand something. Can people understand me through my poetry even if I don't know them? The fact is that you nailed it; I thought it was too vague since it was written under extreme emotional impact- but you managed to feel the soul of it, or what I tried to say anyway. It is just as you said, only about me..

[Pendragon]

Thanks pendragon, I really mean it. I found it really difficult to post this poem as it is really personal, but I needed to understand something. Can people understand me through my poetry even if I don't know them? The fact is that you nailed it; I thought it was too vague since it was written under extreme emotional impact- but you managed to feel the soul of it, or what I tried to say anyway. It is just as you said, only about me..You are more than welcome. Keep writing. Out there, there is always someone who can understand it. Just never give up on yourself!

Best of luck!

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Pen