the spilling

[CdnReader]

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within me
a building intensity,
a threatened smothering
that demands release...
a submersion into emotion
uncontrolled

my body feels ill-conceived
to contain within its boundaries
this thing
this sea swell
that fills up and spills out

flowing from me
in a voiceless cascade

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[amanda_isabel]

hmm. sounds like unquencehed masculine biological desire. anyway, i like the poem.. :)

[CdnReader]

LOL, Amanda. That's not exactly what I had in mind, but you're right.... it fits. :D

[ampoule]

I feel the intensity, if that's the word I'm looking for. Nice!

[PrinceMyshkin]

my body feels ill-conceived
to contain within its boundaries
this thing
this sea swell
that fills up and spills out

flowing from me
in a voiceless cascadecdn/30aug07
.

These are the triumph of it! The "ill-conceived" body really knocked me for a loop!

[Sweets America]

I agree with Amanda! Though this desire is not only a male thing.:blush:
I love your image of the sea and the cascade!
This poem can be seen as dealing with sexual desire, but also with love, and with a lot of other deep feelings actually, feelings that can be overwhelming at times. And sometimes, we even like being flooded, losing control and just let the tide bring us wherever it goes.

[CdnReader]

Thanks, Amp. So....was "intensity" the word you were looking for? Maybe you could check under the coffee table? Mine often hide there.

Jer, I do hope that it was a good loop! You didn't hurt yourself, did you? :p

Oh, Sweets.... you heard everything I was talking about. Thank you thank you thank you. It's still not exactly what I'm trying to convey (as I already told PM by PM), but it's the closest I've come to describing it. I shall continue to work on it. I do like the word "flooded".... may I borrow it?? :)

[Poppy]

I sure like this. I pictured myself with a secret that I just had to tell, but at the last moment I couldn't, or I had promised that I wouldn't. I also see the other posters comments too.

[CdnReader]

I love this interpretation too, Poppy. It's so cool to see our poems through others' eyes. Thanks! :)

[Sweets America]

Yes, Poppy's interpretation is great, I think!!
I think the poem can also deal with anger, or hatred. All the deep feelings like that.
All of that human beings have trouble to control. Feelings cannot be controlled, they control us. And this is sometimes difficult to admit. But we feel it. And it's good sometimes not to control everything. Just to let ourselves be guided by feelings, and sometimes just to let reason aside...
Oh, of course you can borrow my 'flooded'!!

[PrinceMyshkin]

Yes, Poppy's interpretation is great, I think!!
I think the poem can also deal with anger, or hatred. All the deep feelings like that.
All of that human beings have trouble to control. Feelings cannot be controlled, they control us. And this is sometimes difficult to admit. But we feel it. And it's good sometimes not to control everything. Just to let ourselves be guided by feelings, and sometimes just to let reason aside...
Oh, of course you can borrow my 'flooded'!!

Since you were so generous with Cdn re "flooded" may I have some of your feelings?

[Sweets America]

Since you were so generous with Cdn re "flooded" may I have some of your feelings?

Baby...you have them all. All my feelings, and the whole of myself.
Speaking about 'flooded', I will stop here because I don't want to flood Cdn's thread. ;)

[CdnReader]

Flood away. I don't mind one bit. :D